Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be grammatically correct, concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and reduce repetition. Use correct past tense: "I did not have" and a clearer time phrase: "when I was 16." Keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences and use a linking word if adding detail (e.g., "however" or "but").

例: No, I did not have a bike when I was a child. However, I bought one when I was 16, and I used it mainly to ride around my neighborhood with friends.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific, well-linked details. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement: "bikes are popular," "children like"). Replace fillers and unclear words ("crush") with precise terms ("have accidents" or "get hurt"). Use a linking word such as "for example" or "however" when contrasting ideas. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many children ride them for fun and to meet friends after school. However, some parents, including mine, worry about safety because of traffic and potential accidents, so they are more cautious.

× No, I did not had a bike when I was a child, but I had one when I was 16 years old.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child, but I had one when I was 16 years old.

When using the auxiliary did/did not for past simple, the main verb must be in base form. 'Did not had' is incorrect; use 'did not have'. Keep 'had' for the separate clause 'I had one when I was 16' because no auxiliary is used there.

× It, uh, it, it if it counts.

✓ If that counts, yes.

The original is disfluent and contains repeated filler words which break sentence structure. Reordering into a concise conditional 'If that counts, yes' makes the meaning clear and grammatically correct. Avoid repeated fillers and incomplete clauses.

× Yes, it is popular.

✓ Yes, they are popular.

The question asks about 'bikes' (plural), so the pronoun referring back should be plural ('they') and the verb should agree ('are'). Using 'it is' incorrectly treats the plural noun as singular.

× Most of the children in my country likes that and they used uh, they used it as a hobby for going out and having fun with their friends.

✓ Most of the children in my country like them and they use them as a hobby for going out and having fun with their friends.

'Most of the children' is plural, so the verb should be 'like' not 'likes'. Also maintain consistent reference to the plural noun 'bikes' with plural pronouns 'them' and plural verb forms: present tense 'use' to match habitual action. Remove repeated 'they used' and fillers for clarity.

× But some families afraid to crush their child, uh, like my family.

✓ But some families are afraid their child will get hurt, like my family.

The original omits the verb 'are' after the subject 'some families' and uses 'crush' which is unnatural here. Use 'are afraid' plus a clause showing the feared outcome. 'Will get hurt' or 'might hurt' is natural English to express concern about injury. This fixes missing verb and word choice.