Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct tense and clearer phrasing. Start with a topic sentence answering the question, then add one brief supporting detail. Correct tense: use past simple for childhood. Avoid extra words and keep it under 3–4 short sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn’t afford one, so I usually walked to school or took the bus. I sometimes borrowed my friend’s bike for short rides.

提案: Improve accuracy of vocabulary and grammar, and organize with linking words. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details (who uses bikes, how often, reasons). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and correct plural/singular forms.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many middle-class people use them daily because they are cheap and convenient for short commutes. Also, in crowded cities bikes help avoid traffic and save time.

× No, I don't have a like when I have a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

This sentence has multiple tense and word-choice errors. The question asks about the past (when you were a child), so the past simple 'didn't have' is required rather than present 'don't have'. 'Have a like' is incorrect word choice; the intended noun is 'bike'. 'When I have a child' uses present tense and incorrect time reference; it should match the examiner's 'when you were a child' and be 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: Use past simple for past experiences and choose the correct noun (bike).

× Yes, the bugs are popular in my country on a daily basis.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country and are used on a daily basis.

The original uses 'bugs' (wrong word) instead of 'bikes' and includes an unnecessary definite article 'the'. Use plural noun 'bikes' without 'the' for general statements. Also the passive phrasing 'are used on a daily basis' or active 'people use them daily' is clearer. Suggestion: Replace incorrect noun, remove unnecessary article, and use correct plural form and phrasing for general facts.

× The middle class people that are used to travel on bikes and they prefer to use bikes in their daily routine.

✓ Middle-class people are used to travelling by bike, and they prefer to use bikes in their daily routines.

Several issues: 'The middle class people' is better as 'Middle-class people' (adjective order and no unnecessary 'the'). 'That are used to travel' is incorrect: after 'used to' when meaning accustomed to, it should be 'used to travelling' (verb + -ing). Also 'travel on bikes' is less natural than 'travel by bike' or 'cycle'. The sentence repeats subject with 'and they'—while not strictly wrong, smoother wording removes redundancy. 'Daily routine' should be plural or phrased 'in their daily routines' or 'as part of their daily routine'. Suggestion: Use 'used to' + -ing for habits, correct preposition 'by', and improve noun/adjective order.