Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and grammatically correct, keep it concise (max 5 sentences), start with a clear topic sentence, and use linked supporting details. Correct verb tense and avoid redundancy (e.g., “present” repeated). Add one specific detail (what the bike looked like or how old you were) to enrich the answer.

例: Yes — I had a bike as a child. My parents gave it to me for my tenth birthday, and it was a bright red mountain bike. Learning to ride it taught me balance and confidence, and I rode it to school and around the neighborhood every day.

提案: Begin with a direct topic sentence, correct singular/plural agreement and phrasing (e.g., “they are popular” or “bikes are popular”). Use linking words to connect reasons and add specific examples or comparisons (e.g., cycling lanes, typical commuting distances). Keep it concise and avoid repetition of the conclusion sentence.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Because we have a warm climate year-round and many short commutes, people often cycle for exercise and to get to work. For example, many cities have dedicated cycling lanes and bike-sharing schemes, which makes cycling a convenient option for daily travel.

× I'm very thankful that they give me that present because I learned how to ride a bike.

✓ I'm very thankful that they gave me that present because I learned how to ride a bike.

The sentence refers to a past event (receiving a birthday present). The verb 'give' should be in the past tense 'gave' to match the time reference. Suggestion: use past tense verbs for actions completed in the past (e.g., 'they gave me the present').

× Yes, it is popular in our country because I live in a tropical place, so people love to use bike as an exercise or a transport going to their work.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country because I live in a tropical place, so people love to use bikes as exercise or as a way to get to work.

The subject 'bikes' is plural, so the verb and references should agree: use 'bikes are' instead of 'it is'. Also 'use bike' needs a plural noun 'bikes' and countable noun requires articles or plural form; 'as an exercise' is unnatural—use 'as exercise' or 'as a way to get to work'. Suggestions: match subject and verb number, pluralize nouns when referring generally, and use natural collocations ('use bikes', 'as exercise', 'get to work').

× So that's why bikes are popular in our country.

✓ That's why bikes are popular in our country.

Beginning the sentence with 'So that's why' is redundant; remove 'So' to make the sentence more concise and formal. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary fillers—use 'That's why...' for a clear cause-effect statement.