Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with tense consistency and keep the reply natural and concise. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence (because the question asks about the past), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid present-tense verbs like “do have” when referring to childhood.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a gift from my parents, and I rode it every day around the neighborhood, which helped me become more confident and independent.

提案: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect reasons. Be specific and avoid vague or incomplete endings. Use accurate grammar (e.g., avoid awkward relative clauses) and provide one or two clear reasons or examples.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines. Mainly, the warm weather makes cycling comfortable, and many people use bikes for short commutes or as a hobby; for example, I often see groups cycling along coastal roads on weekends.

× Yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. Using 'do have' is present tense and mismatches the time reference. Use 'had' to match past context.

× When I was a child that was a gift from my parents and I used it every day and I'm very thankful for that.

✓ When I was a child, it was a gift from my parents, and I used it every day. I am very thankful for that.

Run-on sentence and mixed contractions: 'that was a gift' is acceptable but 'that' is vague; 'it' refers clearly to the bike. Separate into two sentences for clarity. Maintain past tense for events in childhood ('was', 'used'). 'I'm very thankful' can remain present but better separated. Add commas to improve readability.

× Yes, bikes are popular in our country because I live in a tropical country which is the Philippines so the weather is sunny and the people love to ride a bike or exercise for transport, going to work or a hobby when they're.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country. I live in a tropical country, the Philippines, so the weather is usually sunny, and people love to ride bikes for transport, to go to work, or as a hobby.

Multiple issues: pronoun 'our country' mismatches perspective (use 'my country' when speaking personally). 'Which is the Philippines' is awkward; use apposition 'the Philippines'. 'A bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match the general statement. Phrase 'exercise for transport' is incorrect; use 'ride bikes for transport'. 'Going to work or a hobby when they're' is ungrammatical and incomplete—likely intended 'to go to work or as a hobby'. Also remove unnecessary commas and ensure consistent plural forms and parallel structure.