Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your response repeats the examiner's question and then gives an unclear, partly off-topic answer with vocabulary and grammar mistakes. To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question directly (e.g., “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.”). 2) Add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., “In addition,” “However,” “because”) to explain when you used it or why it was important. 3) Correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., “children are more into technology,” “into sports like that”). 4) Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it every day to ride to a park near my house, which helped me make friends and stay active. In addition, my parents taught me basic repairs, so I learned to fix a flat tire myself.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammar errors, awkward phrasing and a typo, and the ideas are not very specific. To improve: 1) Begin with a direct opinion (e.g., “Bicycles are becoming less popular”). 2) Use clear linking words to contrast ideas (e.g., “However,” “On the other hand”). 3) Provide specific examples or reasons (e.g., increased car ownership, children using smartphones, cycling for commuting or sport). 4) Fix vocabulary and grammar (e.g., “children are more into technology,” “cycling for sport”). Keep answer within 2–4 sentences.

例: Bicycles are becoming less popular in my country, mainly because many families prefer cars and children spend more time on electronic devices. However, some people still use bikes for commuting in cities and others ride regularly for fitness or competitive cycling.

× I can say that in my country bicycle is not that popular nowadays, especially the children are more grown to technologies.

✓ I can say that in my country the bicycle is not that popular nowadays, especially children are more into technology.

Errors: missing definite article before 'bicycle' when speaking generally about the item in a country; awkward phrasing 'the children are more grown to technologies' and incorrect preposition 'to' with 'grown'. Suggestions: use 'the bicycle' to refer to bicycles in the general sense within a specific country, remove 'the' before 'children' for generalization, replace 'more grown to' with 'more into' and 'technologies' (plural) with the uncountable noun 'technology' to sound natural. Also adjust word order for clarity.

× However, I can say that there are still people who are really using bicycles as a form of transportation and also when they are into sports like thiat law.

✓ However, I can say that there are still people who really use bicycles as a form of transportation and also when they take part in sports like that.

Errors: 'really using' is awkward — simple present 'really use' is preferable; 'into sports' is acceptable but 'when they are into sports like thiat law' contains a misspelling 'thiat law' and wrong phrase 'like that' should be used; 'when they take part in sports like that' or 'for sports like that' is clearer. Also 'when' may be unnecessary; using 'and for sports like that' is another option. Suggestions: use 'use' for habitual actions, correct spelling to 'that', and use 'take part in' or 'for' with 'sports' for natural phrasing.