Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ хорош по содержанию, но требует небольших исправлений и упорядочивания. Во-первых, уберите неверные или лишние фразы (например, «from my own» — неверный коллокационный выбор) и уменьшите количество неуверённых звуков («uh»). Во-вторых, начните с чёткого тематического предложения, затем кратко добавьте 1–2 конкретных детали (цвет, кто подарил, что вы делали). Наконец, избегайте излишнего повторения и соблюдайте лимит предложений (максимум 5).

例: Yes, I did. It was a silver bicycle with red stripes that my older cousin gave me, so it was a hand-me-down. Although it was a bit old, it was memorable because my friends and I rode it every day around the neighborhood after school.

提案: Ответ понятен, но содержит разговорные паузы («uh») и немного некорректные конструкции («prefer cars instead of bicycles» лучше «prefer cars to bicycles»). Также фраза «I rarely see how people ride bicycles» звучит неестественно — лучше сказать «I rarely see people riding bicycles». Улучшите структуру: начальное краткое мнение, затем 1–2 конкретные причины с логическими связками (for example, because / mainly due to). Используйте разнообразную лексику («infrastructure», «cycling lanes», «common mode of transport»).

例: No, I don't think bikes are very popular. Most people prefer cars to bicycles, mainly because there is little cycling infrastructure and the roads are not safe for riders. As a result, I rarely see people riding bikes around my neighborhood.

× that was a hand me down from my own.

✓ that was a hand-me-down from my parents.

The preposition 'from' is acceptable but 'my own' is incorrect; it likely intended 'my parents' or 'my family'. Also 'hand me down' should be hyphenated as 'hand-me-down'. Use the correct noun to indicate the source. Suggestion: replace 'from my own' with 'from my parents' or 'from my family'.

× I had a silver bicycle with red stripes.

✓ I had a silver bicycle with red stripes.

No article error; sentence is correct. Included here only to indicate no change is needed — keep the definite/indefinite article 'a' as used.

× my friends and I rode it every day around our neighborhood after school.

✓ My friends and I rode it every day around our neighborhood after school.

Sentence is grammatically correct; capitalization of 'My' required at sentence start. Pronoun use 'my friends and I' is correct (subject form). No pronoun change needed.

× people in my country often prefer uh, cars instead of bicycles, and I rarely see how people ride bicycles around neighborhood and uh, I think it's because we don't have proper roads for them.

✓ People in my country often prefer cars to bicycles, and I rarely see people riding bicycles around the neighborhood. I think it's because we don't have proper bike lanes or roads for them.

Problems: 'prefer ... instead of' is awkward; 'prefer X to Y' is standard. 'I rarely see how people ride' is incorrect—use 'I rarely see people riding' (gerund after 'see' for ongoing action). 'around neighborhood' needs the article 'the neighborhood'. Added clarity by splitting into two sentences and replacing 'proper roads for them' with 'proper bike lanes or roads for them'.

× I rarely see how people ride bicycles around neighborhood

✓ I rarely see people riding bicycles around the neighborhood

After verbs of perception like 'see', use either the base verb for complete actions ('I saw him leave') or the -ing form for ongoing actions ('I saw him leaving'). 'I rarely see how people ride' is unnatural; use 'I rarely see people riding'. Also add 'the' before 'neighborhood'.