Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Chú ý ngữ pháp (thời quá khứ và số ít/ số nhiều), dùng từ chính xác hơn và làm câu tự nhiên, ngắn gọn hơn; bổ sung liên từ phù hợp để câu mượt và tránh lỗi về cấu trúc danh từ. Cụ thể: dùng 'was' thay vì 'were' với 'I', sửa 'rolled' thành 'rode' khi nói về đi xe đạp, sửa 'memory' thành 'memories', và có thể rút gọn hoặc tách thành 2 câu tối đa. Thêm một câu hỗ trợ ngắn gọn với chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ nơi bạn thường đạp hoặc cảm xúc).

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle when I was about eight. My parents bought it for me, and I often rode it around the neighborhood with my friends every afternoon. Riding it helped me become more independent, and it remains one of my fondest childhood memories.

提案: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp, trật tự từ và dùng từ chính xác; trả lời nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể với liên từ để mạch lạc. Sửa các lỗi: bỏ từ thừa như 'make a', dùng 'the cost' hoặc 'costs' đúng, thay 'are cheap' bằng 'are relatively low' hoặc 'are affordable', sửa 'ride by around' thành 'ride them around' hoặc 'use them to get around'. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: vì đường phố nhỏ, giao thông đông, hoặc vì chi phí xăng tăng).

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. The cost of buying a bike is relatively low, so many people can afford one, and they often use bikes to get around cities for short trips. For example, in crowded urban areas people prefer bikes because they are cheap and convenient for commuting.

× I had a red bicycle when I were about 8.

✓ I had a red bicycle when I was about 8.

'Were' is incorrect for first and third person singular in the simple past. Use 'was' with I/he/she/it. Replace 'were' with 'was'. Suggestion: learn past tense of 'to be': I/he/she/it was; you/we/they were.

× It helped me learn independence and it is one of my fondest childhood memory.

✓ It helped me learn independence and it is one of my fondest childhood memories.

The noun 'memory' needs plural 'memories' because 'one of my' requires a plural following noun. Also tense consistency: 'helped' (past) is fine with 'is' (present) here because the memory still exists, but the noun must be plural. Suggestion: use 'memories' after 'one of my'.

× Yes, I think make a the cost of buying are also cheap so people can easily to buy and people also ride by around the city.

✓ Yes, I think the cost of buying bikes is low, so people can easily buy them and also ride around the city.

Original sentence has multiple issues: extra words ('make a the'), incorrect verb agreement ('are' with 'cost' should be 'is'), unnecessary 'to' after 'easily', incorrect preposition 'by around', and missing object for 'buy'. Correction simplifies structure: 'the cost ... is low' (singular subject-verb agreement), 'people can easily buy them' (remove extra 'to' and add object pronoun), 'ride around the city' (correct preposition). Suggestions: keep subject-verb agreement, avoid redundant words, and use correct prepositions.