Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, clear and concise. Start with a topic sentence answering the question, then briefly explain the reason using one or two supporting details and a linking word. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (use past tense for childhood). Use specific vocabulary (e.g. “traumatic fall”, “scared of riding”).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I stopped using bicycles after a traumatic fall that injured my wrist, so now I avoid cycling for transportation. As a result, I usually take public transport or walk instead.

提案: Answer directly and correct grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words to expand with specific supporting details (e.g. infrastructure, purpose, who uses them). Replace incorrect words ("back") with "bike/bicycles" and ensure subject-verb agreement and plural forms.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many cities have dedicated bike lanes. For example, commuters and students often cycle to work or school, and local authorities have expanded lanes to encourage cycling for short trips.

× 'I have a bad experience when I was a child, but nowadays I never use a bike that's a transportation choice because I have a bad experience when I was young.'

✓ 'I had a bad experience when I was a child, and nowadays I never use a bike as a means of transportation because of that experience.'

'The sentence mixes present tense "have" with a past time phrase "when I was a child/young" causing a tense inconsistency. Use the past simple "had" to describe an experience that occurred in the past. Also improve clarity and word choice: "as a means of transportation" is a natural phrase and "because of that experience" connects the cause. Suggest practicing matching time expressions with appropriate verb tenses and using concise linking phrases.'

× 'I have a bad experience when I was a child, but nowadays I never use a bike that's a transportation choice because I have a bad experience when I was young.'

✓ 'I had a bad experience when I was a child, and nowadays I never use a bike as a means of transportation because of that experience.'

'The phrase "that's a transportation choice" is awkward and uses an incorrect preposition/structure. Use "as" with roles or functions ("as a means of transportation"). Also repeat of "when I was young" is unnecessary; remove redundancy. Practice choosing prepositions that match the noun (e.g., "as a means of", "because of").'},{