Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep within 3–4 sentences. Also fix verb patterns ("stop me from learning" or "didn't stop me learning") and tense consistency.

例: I didn't own a bike as a child because my family couldn't afford one, but I still learned to ride. For example, a neighbour let me use their bike and we practised at the park every weekend, which helped build my confidence. As a result, I became comfortable cycling on quiet roads.

提案: Answer directly with present-tense opinion and give specific reasons and an example. Improve grammar (use plural/singular consistently: "bikes are popular", "people save up to buy a bike") and provide clear linking words like "because" or "for example." Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid awkward phrases like "aside bicycle and cars."

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many students and shopkeepers prefer cycling to avoid traffic and save money on petrol, especially in smaller towns.

× Owning a bike in my family was like luxury because we couldn't afford one, but that didn't stop me to learn how to ride.

✓ Owning a bike in my family was a luxury because we couldn't afford one, but that didn't stop me from learning how to ride.

The phrase 'like luxury' is incorrect; use the noun phrase 'a luxury' (article error/word choice). 'Didn't stop me to learn' is incorrect structure; the correct pattern is 'stop someone from doing something', so use 'stop me from learning'. Also change 'learn how to ride' to 'learning how to ride' to follow the gerund after 'from'. Suggestion: use 'a luxury' and the fixed verb pattern 'stop someone from doing something'.

× Fortunately for me, a friend of mine who lives next door owns a bike.

✓ Fortunately for me, a friend of mine who lives next door has a bike.

'Owns a bike' is grammatically acceptable but 'has a bike' is more natural in conversational English; no tense change required. This is a stylistic suggestion rather than a strict grammatical error; if classified strictly, it's fine. Suggestion: use 'has a bike' for more natural speech.

× Once in a while we do go to the park to learn how to ride.

✓ Once in a while we would go to the park to learn how to ride.

The original 'do go' is grammatically possible but sounds odd when referring to habitual past actions. The context is past (childhood), so use 'would go' to indicate habitual actions in the past, or 'used to go'. Suggestion: use 'would go' or 'used to go' for past habitual actions.

× This helps to boost my confidence in bike riding.

✓ This helped to boost my confidence in bike riding.

Context is past (childhood experiences), so the verb should be past tense 'helped' not present 'helps'. Suggestion: match verb tense to the past context.

× Because of its affordability, it was quite popular in my country.

✓ Because of their affordability, bicycles are quite popular in my country.

'Its' incorrectly refers to 'bikes' (plural); pronoun agreement error and wrong tense. Also the second clause uses past tense 'was' while the question asks generally about popularity, so present tense 'are' is appropriate. Use 'their affordability' or rephrase to 'bicycles are'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches antecedent and use present tense for general statements.

× A lot of people save up to bike and it was one of the easiest means of transportation aside bicycle and cars.

✓ A lot of people save up to buy bikes, and they are one of the easiest means of transportation aside from bicycles and cars.

Multiple issues: 'save up to bike' is incorrect verb usage; 'save up to buy bikes' is correct. 'It was' mismatches plural subject; use 'they are'. 'Aside bicycle and cars' needs preposition 'aside from' and consistent plural nouns 'bicycles and cars'. Suggestion: use correct verb collocation 'save up to buy', match subject and verb number, and use 'aside from' with plural nouns.