Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn cần nói rõ và mạch lạc hơn: trả lời trực tiếp, dùng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nối thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Chú ý ngữ pháp (thì quá khứ), từ vựng chính xác (bike, green, primary school) và loại bỏ từ thừa. Ví dụ cấu trúc: "Yes, I did. I had a green bicycle when I was a child. I got it when I was in primary school and I used to ride it to visit friends and practice in the park."

例: Yes, I did. I had a small green bicycle when I was a child. I got it when I was in primary school, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon. It helped me feel independent and I often rode it to visit friends or go to the park.

提案: Bạn nên mở đầu trực tiếp với ý chính, dùng từ vựng chính xác (bikes, popular, motorcycle, public transport), tránh tiếng lặp và tiếng lắp. Thêm 1–2 lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn. Dùng liên từ để rõ ràng (because, however, for example). Ví dụ cấu trúc: "No, I don't think bicycles are very popular. Most people prefer motorcycles or cars because they are faster, and public transport is also common."

例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Most people prefer motorcycles or cars because they are faster and more convenient for long distances. For example, in my city many commuters use motorbikes to get to work, especially when the weather is not suitable for cycling.

× So close when I wear a little I have.

✓ I almost had one when I was little.

The original sentence has incorrect verb tense and word order. Use past tense 'had' for a past situation and correct word order 'when I was little'. Suggestion: place time expression ('when I was little') appropriately and use past simple for completed past events.

× A bike despite a green.

✓ It was a green bike.

The original fragment uses words in the wrong order and omits needed articles. Use 'a green bike' with adjective before noun and include a subject and verb: 'It was a green bike.' Suggestion: place adjectives before nouns and include a verb to form a complete sentence.

× And I better give me one.

✓ My parents promised to give me one.

The original mixes modal-like 'better' incorrectly and lacks a clear subject and proper verb. Use a clear subject 'My parents' and verb 'promised to give' with correct object 'me'. Suggestion: avoid 'I better give me'; instead express who gave or promised the bike.

× But when I study at primary school.

✓ But I got one when I was in primary school.

Original uses present tense 'study' incorrectly for a past event and is a sentence fragment. Use past simple 'got' and time expression 'when I was in primary school' to complete the idea.

× To be honest, I don't think buys or popular in my country because many people in my country use uh, personal vehicle like uh, like motorcycle and car and public stream bar play transportation like Jane and.

✓ To be honest, I don't think bikes are popular in my country because many people use personal vehicles like motorcycles and cars, and public transport like buses and trains.

Multiple errors: 'buys' is wrong word for 'bikes'; verb 'are' needed for plural; 'personal vehicle' should be plural 'personal vehicles'; word order and vocabulary 'public stream bar play' are garbled. Use plural nouns and correct verbs: 'bikes are popular', 'use personal vehicles', 'public transport like buses and trains'. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary, ensure subject-verb agreement for plurals, and list examples clearly separated by commas.