Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child.”), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (because/so/however). Avoid filler sounds (umm, uh) and correct grammar (e.g., "my father had a bike"). Keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. In my country it was uncommon for girls to ride bikes, so my family didn’t buy one for me. However, my father owned a bike, and I sometimes rode as a passenger on it.

提案: Give a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct grammar and linking words (for example, because, for instance, therefore). Replace vague phrases ("has a significant") with precise statements ("are widely used for commuting"). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to commute. For example, many students and workers use motorcycles or bicycles to travel short distances, especially in busy cities where traffic is heavy.

× Now I did not in Asia, umm, there umm, there is no tradition for girls to have a bike as a child or a adult.

✓ No, I didn't when I was a child in Asia. There isn't a tradition for girls to have a bike, either as children or as adults.

The original sentence mixes tenses and omits subjects and auxiliaries. Use past simple 'I didn't' for the past situation and provide a clear subject 'There' with present simple 'isn't' to state a general fact. Also use parallel forms 'as children or as adults' for clarity. Suggestion: separate the ideas into two sentences and keep tense consistent. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Uh, for that I didn't have any bike, but but my father was a bike.

✓ Because of that, I didn't have a bike, but my father had one.

The phrase 'my father was a bike' is incorrect pronoun/verb use and meaning: a person cannot 'be' a bike. Use 'had one' to indicate possession. Also use 'a bike' (singular) and remove redundant words. Maintain past simple tense for past possession. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yeah, bike are quite popular in my country.

✓ Yeah, bikes are quite popular in my country.

The noun needs plural form 'bikes' to agree with plural verb 'are'. Use the plural when speaking generally about bicycles. Grammar problem type ID:1

× People who are job holder or student, uh, they use bike in my country and bike uh, has a significant.

✓ People who have jobs or are students use bikes in my country, and bikes are significant.

'Job holder' is unnatural; use 'people who have jobs' or 'workers'. Use parallel structure 'have jobs or are students'. 'Use bikes' requires plural. The clause 'bike has a significant' is incomplete and missing a noun (significance what?). I corrected it to 'bikes are significant' to be grammatical, but ideally specify what they are significant for (transport, economy). Keep present simple for general facts. Grammar problem type ID:12