Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a slightly longer, natural response: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one short supporting detail or reason. Avoid filler words (umm, uh) and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Use a linking word if you add another idea (for example, 'because' or 'so').

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I usually walked to school because my home was nearby, and my parents preferred me to be safe on foot. As a result, I only rode a bike occasionally at friends' houses.

提案: Answer directly, then give specific supporting reasons and a brief comparison. Remove hesitation words and use linking words for coherence (e.g., 'because', 'however', 'for example'). Try to use context-relevant vocabulary like 'public transport', 'commute', or 'infrastructure'.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because most people rely on public transport such as jeepneys and pedicabs. Moreover, the roads and cycling infrastructure aren't well developed, so many people find riding unsafe compared with taking public vehicles.

× I think bikes are not umm, popular in our country because uh, usually there are public vehicles here like jeepneys and pedicabs.

✓ I think bicycles are not very popular in my country because usually there are public vehicles here, such as jeepneys and pedicabs.

The original sentence uses 'our country' which may be acceptable but in an exam answer 'my country' is more natural when speaking about personal experience (pronoun choice). Also 'bikes' is informal — 'bicycles' is more appropriate. The phrase 'are not umm, popular' is awkward; replacing with 'are not very popular' clarifies degree. Finally, replace 'like' with 'such as' for examples and add a comma for clarity. Suggestion: use 'my' for personal reference, choose more precise vocabulary and avoid filler words.'