Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cümlelerin zaman uyumunu düzeltmeli, daha doğal ifadeler kullanmalı ve gereksiz tekrarları kaldırmalısınız. Ayrıca kısa bir konu cümlesiyle başlayıp, ardından nedenini açıklayan bir veya iki destekleyici cümle ekleyin. Örneğin: geçmiş zaman kullanırken 'had' ve 'couldn't' gibi doğru fiil formlarını tercih edin; 'haven't a chance' yerine 'didn't have a chance' ya da 'never got a chance' demelisiniz. Bağlaçlar (because, so, but) kullanarak cümleleri mantıksal olarak bağlayın ve konuşma doldurucularını (uh) azaltın.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I never learned to ride it because my brother didn’t teach me. As a result, I didn’t get a chance to practice and still can’t ride confidently.

提案: Cevabınızı doğrudan bir konu cümlesiyle başlatıp, ardından iki kısa destekleyici cümleyle gerekçenizi açıklayın. Dilbilgisi ve kelime kullanımına dikkat edin: 'I don't think so' (şu anki görüş için), 'there aren't many bike lanes' ve 'we can't ride bikes' gibi doğru ifadeleri tercih edin. Gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın ve bağlaçlarla cümleleri bağlayın (for example, because, so). Ayrıca tekil/çoğul uyumuna dikkat edin.

例: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country because there aren’t many bike lanes and most roads are designed for cars. Therefore, people prefer driving rather than cycling for daily travel.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child but uh, my brother didn't teach me so I haven't a chance to learn how riding a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but my brother didn't teach me, so I didn't have a chance to learn how to ride a bike.

The student mixed present and past tenses: 'have' should be past 'had' to match 'when I was a child' (present tense issue). 'I haven't a chance' is incorrect for English; use past 'didn't have a chance'. 'How riding a bike' should be 'how to ride a bike' (infinitive after 'learn'). Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for past time references, use 'have' -> 'had', 'haven't' -> 'didn't have', and use the infinitive 'to ride' after 'learn'.

× I didn't think so because there aren't too much roads for a bike.

✓ I don't think so because there aren't too many roads for bikes.

The speaker used past 'didn't think' but the question asks for a general opinion about now, so present 'don't think' is appropriate (present tense issue). Also 'too much' should be 'too many' with countable noun 'roads' (quantifier usage tied to present tense); 'for a bike' is better as 'for bikes' (plural) to express generality. Suggestion: use present simple for current opinions and 'too many' with countable nouns.

× Bike lanes. So we we can't bike, we can't ride bike.

✓ There are no bike lanes, so we can't ride bikes.

Fragment 'Bike lanes.' should be integrated; 'we can't bike' is informal but acceptable; however 'ride bike' lacks plural 'bikes' or article (singular) — using plural 'bikes' expresses general ability (singular and plural issue). Also better to use full sentence structure. Suggestion: combine into one sentence and use 'ride bikes' or 'ride a bike' depending on context.

× Mostly it's our our roads for cars.

✓ Mostly our roads are for cars.

The phrase repeats 'our' twice (pronoun redundancy) and uses awkward 'it's' structure. Better: 'Mostly our roads are for cars.' This corrects the sentence structure and removes the duplicate pronoun (incorrect use of pronouns/article error). Suggestion: avoid repeating words and use a clear subject-verb structure ('our roads are').