Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify grammar and make the response more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms (e.g., "learned to ride"), avoid redundancy ("my mom, my father" is unclear), and keep within 3–4 sentences. Add one specific detail to enrich the answer, and use a linking word for coherence.

例: Yes — I learned to ride a bike when I was seven and rode it around my neighborhood a lot. It was great exercise and a fun way to spend time outdoors, so my parents often took me to the nearby park at the weekend where I practised new skills.

提案: Improve clarity and grammar, and give specific supporting details. Begin with a clear statement, then expand with reasons or examples using linking words. Correct sentence structure (e.g., "there are many bikes"; "there is a cycling park"). Remove unintelligible fragments ("Particular suit for the second nurse to") and instead add a concrete example such as where people cycle or who uses bikes.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. There are scooters and bikes on most city streets, and many towns have dedicated cycle lanes and at least one large cycling park. For example, families and students often cycle to school or the market because it is cheap and convenient.

× I learned ride a bike when I was 7 and I spent a lot of time cycling around my neighborhood.

✓ I learned to ride a bike when I was 7 and I spent a lot of time cycling around my neighborhood.

After 'learned' the infinitive with to ('to ride') is required to express acquiring a skill. Using the base verb 'ride' without 'to' is incorrect here. Suggestion: use 'learned to ride' or 'learned how to ride'.

× I loved it because it was excellent exercise, a fun way to be outdoors, and my mom, my father, used to take me to nearby park every weekend.

✓ I loved it because it was excellent exercise, a fun way to be outdoors, and my mom and my father used to take me to the nearby park every weekend.

'Nearby park' requires the definite article 'the' because a specific park is implied. Also the list 'my mom, my father' is awkward; use 'my mom and my father'. Replace the commas with 'and' for correct coordination. Suggestion: use 'the nearby park' and join the parents with 'and'.

× There are many bikes on the streets in my country and there has a cycling park.

✓ There are many bikes on the streets in my country and there is a cycling park.

After 'there' the verb must agree with the noun that follows. 'A cycling park' is singular, so use 'there is' not 'there has'. 'There has' is ungrammatical in this context. Suggestion: use 'there is' for singular and 'there are' for plural.

× Particular suit for the second nurse to.

✓ It is particularly suitable for second-year nursing students too.

The original fragment is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Particular suit for the second nurse to' lacks a subject and proper word forms. I changed 'Particular' to the adverb 'particularly' and 'suit' to 'suitable', and clarified 'second' as 'second-year nursing students' to fit likely meaning; 'to' becomes 'too' if meaning 'also'. Suggestion: ensure a subject and use correct adjective/adverb forms; restructure fragments into full sentences.