Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and clearly with correct grammar and relevant vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child.”), then give one or two brief supporting details using linking words (because/so) and correct verb forms. Avoid irrelevant or incorrect words. Keep it to 1–3 short sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents preferred us to use public transport. As a result, I learned to take buses and trains to school and activities.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific details and linking words. Correct grammar: use present simple for general facts, plural forms, and concise vocabulary. Limit to 2–3 sentences and include an example or reason (e.g. affordability, convenience).

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in India because they are affordable and convenient for short commutes. For example, many people use motorcycles or scooters to travel to work and to run errands in busy cities.

× Oh no, I we have not Viagra when I'm child, my parents will prefer to be used public transport.

✓ Oh no, I did not have a bike when I was a child; my parents preferred to use public transport.

Multiple errors: wrong word choice ('Viagra' instead of 'a bike'), incorrect pronoun and auxiliary usage ('I we have not' should be 'I did not have'), incorrect tense and form ('I'm child' should be 'I was a child'), and wrong modal/auxiliary for past preference ('will prefer to be used' should be 'preferred to use'). This sentence contains past-tense context, so use past simple verbs (did not have, was, preferred) and correct vocabulary. Suggestion: say short clear clauses in past simple for childhood facts and use correct nouns (bike) and verbs (use).

× Yes, I I, I think yes, because I'm come from India and there is a lot of people use bikes for go is jobs and work and is important works.

✓ Yes, I think so, because I come from India and a lot of people use bikes to go to work; it is important for their jobs.

Errors include repetition ('I I, I'), incorrect present progressive use ('I'm come' should be simple present 'I come' or 'I am from India'), wrong quantifier and structure ('there is a lot of people' should be 'a lot of people'), incorrect verb forms ('use bikes for go' should be 'use bikes to go'), and awkward noun phrases ('is important works' should be 'it is important for their jobs'). Use simple present for general facts (I come from India, people use bikes), proper quantifiers (a lot of people), and infinitive 'to go' to express purpose. Reduce repetition and make clauses clear.