Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (say "tricycle" not "tray cycle") and avoid unnecessary filler words. Keep answers to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. My grandmother bought me a tricycle when I was about four, and I learned to ride it in our courtyard because it was stable for a beginner. As a result, I felt more confident on two wheels later on.

提案: Organize the response with a clear topic sentence followed by linked supporting points. Use linking words (for example, "because", "also", "for instance") and correct small errors ("eco-friendly", "a lot of public bikes"). Avoid fillers like "umm". Provide one specific example or statistic if possible to strengthen your answer.

例: Yes, definitely — bicycles are very popular in China because they are convenient and eco-friendly. For example, many cities now have large public bike-sharing systems, which makes cycling an easy option for short trips and helps reduce traffic congestion.

× But actually it's a tray cycle with three wheels that I can easily learn to ride.

✓ But actually it's a tricycle with three wheels that I could easily learn to ride.

The sentence contains an issue with word choice and tense/modal appropriateness. 'Tray cycle' is a misspelling; the correct word is 'tricycle'. Also, the clause 'that I can easily learn to ride' is awkward because 'learn to ride' normally pairs with a past or ability modal when referring to childhood experience. Using 'could' fits the past context 'when I was about four years old' and indicates past ability. Suggestion: correct the noun to 'tricycle' and use 'could' to match the past-time setting: 'that I could easily learn to ride.'

× Yes definitely, bikes are very convenient and eco friendly and riding a bike is good for our health.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are very convenient and eco-friendly, and riding a bike is good for our health.

Punctuation and word-formation are the issues here. 'Definitely' should be separated by commas or a pause. 'Eco friendly' should be hyphenated as 'eco-friendly' when used before a noun. Also the sentence runs on; adding a comma and conjunction separation improves clarity. Suggestion: add punctuation, hyphenate 'eco-friendly', and split into clearer clauses.

× And in China most of the cities have a lots of umm public bikes where people can easily find one to ride.

✓ And in China most cities have lots of public bikes where people can easily find one to ride.

There is a mismatch and redundancy in number expression. 'Most of the cities' is acceptable but 'most cities' is more natural. 'Have a lots of' is incorrect: 'a' cannot co-occur with 'lots of.' Use 'lots of public bikes' or 'a lot of public bikes.' Suggestion: remove 'a' and use 'most cities' for conciseness: 'most cities have lots of public bikes.' Also remove filler 'umm' in formal responses.