Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure: use correct tense (past), simplify and split into 2–3 coherent sentences, and remove repetitions. Add one or two specific supporting details (when, how often, feelings or a short anecdote) and use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “so”, “also”, “because”, “and”). Keep answers natural and concise (no more than 5 sentences).

例: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child. My father bought it for me, and I rode it to school every day. I also used it to visit my friend and my grandfather because they lived nearby.

提案: Correct grammar and make statements more specific with concrete reasons and one brief example. Use linking words (for example, “because”, “however”, “for example”) and avoid absolute words like “everyone.” Keep it concise and add a short comparison or statistic if possible to strengthen your point.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in Malaysia. This is mainly because many people own cars and public roads and bike lanes are limited, so cycling is less convenient. For example, my neighbors usually drive even for short trips, which makes biking uncommon.

× Yes, I have a bike when I'm a child, the bike is bought from my father and actually I ride my bike to the school every day and and also to ride this bike to my friend's house and to visit my grandfather's because my friend's father's is living near.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. The bike was bought by my father, and I actually rode my bike to school every day. I also rode it to my friend's house and to visit my grandfather because my friend's father lived nearby.

Multiple tense errors and sentence-structure issues. The question asks about the past, so use past tense: 'have' -> 'had', 'I'm' -> 'I was', 'is bought' -> 'was bought' (passive past), 'ride' -> 'rode'. Possessive and noun forms: 'my grandfather's' used incorrectly without noun -> change to 'my grandfather'. 'friend's father's is living near' is ungrammatical; intended: 'my friend's father lived nearby'. Also split run-on into separate sentences and use 'to school' not 'to the school' in general statements.

× Actually, I don't think bikes are popular in my country because I live in Malaysia.

✓ Actually, I don't think bikes are popular in my country because I live in Malaysia.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable and uses present tense correctly. No correction needed.

× Everyone in Malaysia have their own cars and our infrastructure is not that so improved compared to other country.

✓ Everyone in Malaysia has their own cars, and our infrastructure is not as well developed compared to other countries.

'Everyone' is singular, so verb should be 'has' not 'have' (subject-verb agreement). 'Not that so improved' is unidiomatic; use 'not as well developed' or 'not that developed'. 'Other country' should be plural 'other countries' for comparison.

× So everyone when they want to go out, they will drive the car instead of ride a bike.

✓ So when people want to go out, they will drive a car instead of riding a bike.

After 'instead of' use the -ing form: 'riding' not base verb 'ride'. Also 'everyone when they' is awkward; use 'when people' or 'when they'. Use article 'a car' and 'a bike' for general reference.