Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki kejelasan dan tata bahasa. Jawaban Anda tidak jelas karena ada kata-kata yang salah (mis: "called offered a big", "burned one"). Berikan kalimat topik langsung, lalu jelaskan dengan detail singkat menggunakan kata penghubung. Contoh perbaikan: jelaskan siapa yang memiliki sepeda, bagaimana Anda pergi ke taman, dan satu detail tambahan tentang pengalaman Anda.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents couldn't afford one, so I usually walked to the park or borrowed a friend's bike sometimes. Because the nearest park was about 15 minutes away, walking became a regular routine for me.

提案: Jawaban terlalu singkat dan tidak jelas. Anda perlu menjawab langsung lalu menjelaskan alasan dengan contoh atau perbandingan. Hindari kata-kata yang tidak relevan dan gunakan linking words untuk kelancaran (misalnya: "because", "however"). Berikan satu alasan utama dan satu contoh dukungan.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because many people prefer cars or motorcycles for daily travel. For example, in cities the roads are busy and there are few safe bike lanes, so cycling is less common compared with other transport.

× No I didn't. My family called offered a big when I was a child so I actually walked or burned one from a friend to go to the park.

✓ No, I didn't. My family couldn't afford a bike when I was a child, so I usually walked or borrowed one from a friend to go to the park.

The sentence has multiple structure and word choice problems. 'called offered a big' is ungrammatical and likely intended as 'couldn't afford a bike'. 'Big' should be 'bike'. 'Burned one' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'borrowed'. Also punctuation and connectors need fixing. Suggestion: break into two clauses with a comma and use the correct verbs 'couldn't afford', 'walked', and 'borrowed'. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× No big snow popular in my country.

✓ No, bikes are not very popular in my country.

This fragment is ungrammatical and appears to contain incorrect words: 'big snow' is wrong—likely intended 'bikes are'. The sentence needs a subject and verb. Suggestion: use the subject 'bikes' and the verb 'are not' and add an adverb 'very' or 'very much' if needed.