Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and relevant: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct vocabulary and grammar (bike vs bag, buyers vs bicycles) and avoid unrelated statements. Use one linking word if you add a detail.

例: Yes, I did. I owned two bicycles as a child: a small red one for riding around my neighborhood and a slightly larger blue one I used to go to school. Because I rode them often, I became quite confident cycling on busy streets.

提案: Answer directly and add a specific reason or example using linking words. Use correct tense and natural phrasing (e.g., “There used to be many bikes” or “Bikes were common”); avoid vague phrases like “modern time.”

例: Bikes used to be very common in my country, but nowadays cars are much more popular. For example, when I was young most people cycled to work, whereas now many families prefer cars due to longer commutes and higher incomes.

× Every child must have a bag, I guessed.

✓ Every child must have a bike, I guess.

The student used 'bag' instead of 'bike' (wrong word choice) and 'guessed' which contradicts the present-tense context of the statement. Replace the noun with the intended word 'bike' and use present simple 'I guess' to express the speaker's current opinion. Use of 'must' is acceptable for general obligation, and 'I guess' is a hedging phrase in present time. Use example: 'Every child must have a bike, I guess.'

× And actually I have had two buyers when I was a child.

✓ And actually I had two bikes when I was a child.

The original sentence contains multiple problems: 'have had' is an incorrect tense for a past habitual fact here, 'buyers' is the wrong noun (should be 'bikes'), and plural 'buyers' changes the meaning. According to the allowed types, this suggestion focuses on singular/plural noun choice and correct simple past usage. Use simple past 'I had' to describe possession in childhood and 'bikes' as the correct plural noun. Suggestion: 'And actually I had two bikes when I was a child.'

× It used to have a lot of bikes when I was a child, but now in modern time there are many cars in my country.

✓ There used to be a lot of bikes when I was a child, but now in modern times there are many cars in my country.

The phrase 'used to' with existence requires 'there used to be' rather than 'it used to have.' 'It used to have' is incorrect because 'it' has no clear referent and 'have' doesn't express existence in this context. Also 'modern time' should be 'modern times' or 'modern times' plural. Use 'There used to be' to indicate past existence and present 'there are' for the current situation. Suggestion: 'There used to be a lot of bikes when I was a child, but now in modern times there are many cars in my country.'