Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise and coherent. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid trailing phrases like "but then" and repetition. Keep it under five sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My father promised to buy one if I came top of the class, so I studied hard and improved my grades. However, because of financial difficulties he couldn't afford it, so I never owned one.

提案: Answer directly, then give specific reasons with linking words and avoid repetition. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., "transport" instead of "communication") and provide one concrete example to support your point. Keep it within five sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many commuters use motorbikes to avoid traffic and save on fuel costs. Moreover, bicycles are common in rural areas for short trips, which makes them a widespread mode of transport.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I always wanted to own one.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I always wanted to own one.

No change needed; sentence correctly uses past simple for a past state (didn't have) and past habitual desire (always wanted). Keep as is.

× But then my dad used to tell us that we should strive to come out first in class and he would get us a bike.

✓ But then my dad used to tell us that we should strive to come out first in class and he would get us a bike.

No change needed; 'used to' correctly describes a habitual past action and 'would' expresses a past conditional promise. Sentence is grammatically correct.

× And I really tried my best, but due to financial constraints he wasn't able to get the bike for me.

✓ And I really tried my best, but due to financial constraints he wasn't able to get the bike for me.

No change needed; past simple 'tried' and past negative 'wasn't able' correctly describe past events and inability. Sentence is correct.

× But then.

✓ (Remove fragment)

This is a sentence fragment with no verb or complete idea. To fix, attach it to the previous sentence or complete the thought, e.g. 'But then nothing happened.' or 'But then he changed his mind.' Ensure a subject and verb are present.

× I do think bikes are popular in my country, the reason being that I see a lot of bikes around when I'm working on the road.

✓ I do think bikes are popular in my country, because I see a lot of bikes around when I'm on the road.

Change 'the reason being that' to 'because' for natural flow. 'Working on the road' is unnatural here; use 'on the road' to indicate being out/traveling. Tenses are consistent (present simple and present continuous) so keep them.

× I see people with lots of bikes and it's a very easy means of communication.

✓ I see many people with bikes, and they're a very easy means of transportation.

'Lots of bikes' is informal; 'many people with bikes' is clearer. 'Means of communication' is incorrect collocation — bikes are a means of transportation, not communication. Also match plural: 'they're' refers to bikes/people.

× You really don't need to burn fuel.

✓ You really don't need to burn fuel.

Sentence is grammatically correct. 'Really' correctly modifies the negative modal meaning; no change needed.

× You don't need to burn fuel. And.

✓ You don't need to burn fuel.

The fragment 'And.' is incomplete and should be removed or completed. Avoid sentence fragments; connect with the previous sentence or finish the thought, e.g. 'And it's cheaper to maintain.'