Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and use correct tense and clearer wording. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past simple consistently, shorten redundancy, add one specific detail and a linking phrase for coherence. Aim for 2–4 concise sentences and correct collocations (e.g., “primary school,” “go to school,” “gossip about our teachers” → avoid complaining).

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was at primary school. I rode it to school and back home with my best friend, and after lessons we often cycled along the river while chatting about our day.

提案: Answer directly and use clearer vocabulary and grammar. Use a topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., “because” or “for example”). Avoid hesitations and incorrect collocations (“mutual transportation system,” “go to anywhere,” “eco friendly lifestyles”).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular, especially in rural areas. Because public transport is limited there, many people use bicycles for commuting and short trips; for example, farmers often cycle to market, and riding bikes is also seen as an eco-friendly choice.

× Since I am back on my primary school, I rode a bike to go to school and head home with my best friends.

✓ When I was in primary school, I rode a bike to go to school and to head home with my best friends.

The original sentence mixes tenses and uses an incorrect expression 'back on my primary school'. The context is past habitual action, so use past tense 'When I was in primary school'. Also add the infinitive 'to' before 'head home' for parallel structure. Suggestion: use 'When I was in primary school' for clear time reference and keep verbs in past tense for habitual past actions.

× Every day after school we rode a bike along a river, chatting and gossiping our teachers.

✓ Every day after school we rode our bikes along the river, chatting and gossiping about our teachers.

Issues: 'rode a bike' should be pluralized to match 'we' and habitual action: 'rode our bikes'; 'a river' more often 'the river' if a specific local river; 'gossiping our teachers' is incorrect — gossip is followed by 'about' the object. Use 'gossiping about our teachers'. Also keep participles 'chatting and gossiping' as activities accompanying riding.

× Especially in some rural areas without mutual transportation system, people tend to ride the bike to go to anywhere they want to since it's a kind of, uh, eco friendly lifestyles and showcase our responsibility to nature.

✓ Especially in some rural areas without a public transportation system, people tend to ride bikes to go anywhere they want since it is a kind of eco-friendly lifestyle and showcases our responsibility to nature.

Multiple preposition and article errors: 'mutual transportation system' is incorrect — use 'public transportation system'. Missing article before 'public transportation system' so add 'a'. 'Ride the bike' should be general 'ride bikes'. 'Go to anywhere' is incorrect preposition: use 'go anywhere'. 'Eco friendly lifestyles' should be singular 'eco-friendly lifestyle' to refer to the practice, and 'showcase' must agree with singular subject 'it' so use 'showcases'. Suggestions: use correct collocations ('public transportation', 'ride bikes', 'go anywhere', 'eco-friendly lifestyle') and ensure subject-verb agreement.