Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more specific and natural: give a brief topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid filler words like “Umm.” Use linking words if adding details. For example, mention the type of bike, how old you were, who gave it to you, or a memory of riding it.

例: Yes, I did — I had a bright red bicycle when I was about seven. It was a simple single-speed bike that my parents bought me for my birthday, and I remember learning to ride it in the park near our house. Because I practiced every day, I became quite confident riding on quiet streets.

提案: Give a clear opinion with specific reasons and examples. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two supporting points using linking words such as “because,” “for example,” or “in particular.” Mention where bikes are popular (cities, countryside), who uses them, or trends such as bike lanes or bike-sharing schemes.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances. For example, many people ride bicycles in cities to avoid traffic, and in recent years bike-sharing programs and better bike lanes have made cycling even more common.

× Umm, the bike is popular in my country.

✓ Umm, bikes are popular in my country.

The student used the definite article 'the' with 'bike' to refer generally to bicycles in the country. In English, when speaking about a general class of countable nouns in plural, no article or the plural form is used (e.g., 'bikes are...'). Also the context asks about general popularity, so plural 'bikes' matches meaning and subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: use the plural noun without 'the' when referring to something in general: 'Bikes are popular in my country.'