Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a slightly longer, more natural response that directly answers and adds a brief reason or detail. Use one clear topic sentence then an optional short supporting detail. Avoid filler words like “well” if unnecessary.

例: No, I didn't have a bike as a child. My family lived in a small apartment and my parents preferred I spend time at the local sports centre instead.

提案: Organise your answer: start with a clear topic sentence stating your view, then give two concise supporting points using linking words. Avoid mistakes and informal phrasing (e.g. “vice” → “bike”, “gonna” → “going to”). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use precise vocabulary (popular, practical, healthy).

例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country. For many people, especially students and sporty people, cycling is a practical and inexpensive way to get around, and it’s also a healthy form of exercise.

× If one is very sporty, then maybe yeah, they would have a bike on their home because I think that vice is gonna make their life easier to travel from one place to another.

✓ If someone is very sporty, then maybe they would have a bike at home because I think that a bike is going to make their life easier when travelling from one place to another.

Multiple issues: 'one' vs 'someone' is acceptable but 'they' with 'one' is inconsistent (Incorrect use of pronouns, ID 12) and word 'vice' is a spelling/word-choice error (should be 'bike'). 'on their home' is incorrect preposition and noun collocation (use 'at home', ID 11). 'gonna' is informal and nonstandard; use 'going to' (Modal/tense/form, ID 4/7). Also add article 'a' before 'bike' (Article error, ID 22). 'to travel' should be 'when travelling' to fit noun phrase and tense (Verb + -ing form, ID 8). Suggestion: use 'someone' or change pronoun to 'they' consistently, replace 'vice' with 'bike', use 'at home', 'a bike', 'is going to', and 'when travelling'.

× And plus it's a fun and healthy way to be fit.

✓ Plus, it's a fun and healthy way to keep fit.

Minor issues: starting with 'And plus' is redundant and informal—use 'Plus,' (Incorrect conjunction use, ID 16). 'to be fit' is grammatical but 'to keep fit' is a more natural collocation (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs, ID 13). Suggestion: remove 'And' and use 'Plus, it's a fun and healthy way to keep fit.'