Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct tense and avoid hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details (where you rode it, how often, or a memorable moment). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words like “and” or “also.”

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle when I was a child, and I rode it to school every day. I also remember learning to ride on the pavement near my house, which was a lot of fun.

提案: Answer directly, avoid repetition, and give at least one specific reason with an example. Use a linking word (for example, because, moreover) and try to vary vocabulary (convenient, affordable, eco-friendly, practical). Keep to 2–4 sentences and be concise.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and handy for short trips. For example, many people cycle to work or the market to avoid traffic and save money.

× Yes, I have, umm, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student mixes present simple ('I have') with past time reference ('when I was a child'). This is a tense error (Past tense issue, ID 5). Use the simple past 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs for actions or states that occurred in the past, e.g., 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because it's because they are very convenient for many people.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they are very convenient for many people.

The sentence contains a redundancy 'because it's because' which is a sentence structure error (ID 26) and incorrect pronoun reference ('it' is unnecessary). Remove the extra 'it's because' and keep a single 'because' to clearly link cause and effect. Suggestion: Say 'because they are very convenient for many people.'

× And it's very useful.

✓ They are also very useful.

The short sentence 'And it's very useful.' uses 'it' ambiguously and repeats an idea already expressed; this is an incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and weak sentence structure (ID 26). Replace 'it' with the plural subject 'they' (referring to bikes) and combine or link to the previous sentence for coherence. Suggestion: Use 'They are also very useful.' or combine into the previous sentence: '...people, and they are also very useful.'