Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and correct mistakes, keep answers concise (max 5 sentences), use accurate vocabulary and linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. "Yes, I had a bike when I was a child."), then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words such as "so" or "because." Also fix vocabulary errors ("bag" → "bike") and tense consistency (use past tense: "practiced").

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a red bike with training wheels that my parents bought for me, and I practiced riding it every afternoon in the park because I wanted to get better. As a result, I felt excited and more confident about learning to ride a motorcycle later.

提案: Make your opinion direct and support it with specific reasons and linking words. Begin with a clear opinion sentence (e.g. "Not particularly"). Then give 1–2 concrete reasons and a brief example or comparison. Avoid vague phrases like "everyone" and correct article use ("a motorcycle" → "motorcycles").

例: Not particularly. Most people prefer cars or motorcycles because they are faster and more convenient for long distances. For example, in my city, public transport is limited, so many families choose cars instead of bicycles.

× Well, not really though, because everyone right now is using cars and a motorcycle, so it's like an upgrade.

✓ Well, not really, because right now everyone is using cars and motorcycles, so it's like an upgrade.

The original sentence mixes plural and singular nouns inconsistently: 'cars and a motorcycle' implies a group plus a single item. To refer to the general trend, use the plural 'motorcycles' to match 'cars' and the subject 'everyone'. Also move 'right now' next to the verb for natural word order. Suggestion: keep number agreement when listing general items (use plural for both items).

× I practice riding it every afternoon in the park because I wanted to get better and eventually learn to ride a motorcycle and it always made me feel excited and more confident.

✓ I practiced riding it every afternoon in the park because I wanted to get better and eventually learn to ride a motorcycle, and it always made me feel excited and more confident.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I practice' with past tense 'I wanted' and 'made', causing inconsistent tense usage. The question asks about childhood, so the past tense is appropriate. Change 'I practice' to 'I practiced' to maintain past tense throughout. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. Suggestion: keep verbs in the same time frame when narrating past events; use past simple for habitual actions in the past (practiced, wanted, made).