Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (umm) and use correct verb forms (e.g., ‘I used it to go to and from school’).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it to ride to school every day and to visit friends after classes, which saved time and gave me some exercise.

提案: Give a clear opinion followed by specific reasons and a linking phrase. Reduce hesitation and correct collocations (say ‘public transport’ and ‘rural area’). Provide one concrete example or comparison. Keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular, especially in rural areas like my hometown. This is because public transport is limited, so many children and adults rely on bikes to get to school, markets, or nearby villages; for example, my cousin rides ten kilometres to work every day.

× Umm this bike is for me too. Went to the school and after school to come back at home.

✓ Umm, this bike was mine. I would go to school on it, and ride it to come back home after school.

The original contains sentence fragments and incorrect word order. 'This bike is for me too' is awkward and tense-inconsistent with past context; use 'this bike was mine' to match 'I had a bike when I was a child.' 'Went to the school and after school to come back at home' is a fragment missing a subject and uses incorrect prepositions and word order. Add a subject and use 'go to school' and 'come back home' with proper sequence: 'I would go to school on it, and ride it to come back home after school.' Suggestions: always include a subject and verb, keep tense consistent, and use natural collocations like 'go to school', 'come back home'.

× my hometown is at a rural area

✓ my hometown is in a rural area

Use 'in' with 'area' to indicate location. 'At' is used for specific points; 'in a rural area' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also include the article 'a' before 'rural area.'

× So, umm, this is very open to see the children have a bike to uh, ride anywhere they want to go because this, uh, here is public transfer is not.

✓ So, umm, it is common to see children with bikes who can ride anywhere they want because there is not much public transportation here.

The original is ungrammatical and contains awkward phrases. 'This is very open to see' is not idiomatic; use 'it is common to see.' 'Children have a bike to ride anywhere they want to go' is wordy; use 'children with bikes who can ride anywhere they want.' 'This, uh, here is public transfer is not' mixes word order and missing auxiliary verbs; correct to 'there is not much public transportation here.' Suggestions: simplify clauses, use natural expressions ('common to see'), and maintain correct word order for existence statements ('there is/are').

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

✓ Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

Question is correct and uses appropriate present tense to ask about general truth. No correction needed.