Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, use correct tense and reduce filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (past tense) and clearer vocabulary will improve coherence.

例: Yes, I did. I learned to ride when I was about five years old; my parents bought me a small children’s bike. At first I was unsteady, and I had a few minor collisions with parked cars, but I improved quickly with practice.

提案: Answer directly, use more precise vocabulary and link ideas smoothly. Mention specific facts or comparisons and avoid hesitations. Use correct verbs (e.g., "rent" or "borrow") and provide one concrete example or reason to support your view.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Taiwan. For example, the government runs a public bike-sharing system that lets people rent bikes cheaply—usually around NT$30–60 for half an hour—so many commuters and tourists use it for short trips.

× Yes, I have umm, the first time I'm riding a bike is when I'm uh, like maybe five years old and they're carrying bought me a bike for children, the small bike, and while I was burning I always hit some cars or something.

✓ Yes, I did. The first time I rode a bike was when I was about five years old. My parents bought me a small children's bike, and while I was learning I often hit things like cars or other objects.

Multiple present/past tense errors and awkward verb choices. Use simple past for a finished event in childhood: 'did' and 'rode' (past of ride), and 'was' for age. 'They're carrying bought me' is incorrect; likely 'my parents bought me'. 'While I was burning' is incorrect word choice; should be 'learning'. 'Always hit some cars or something' should be 'often hit things like cars' to be natural. Suggestion: use simple past for past events, choose accurate verbs (learn instead of burning), and replace vague 'something' with 'other objects'. (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× Yes, it's very common in Taiwan, actually.

✓ Yes, they are very common in Taiwan, actually.

Subject reference and agreement: the question asks about bikes (plural). 'It's' (it is) incorrectly uses singular; use plural 'they are' to match 'bikes'. Also present simple is appropriate for general facts. Suggestion: match pronoun/verb number to the noun being discussed. (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× Our government has built a system for public people to, uh, reuse the bike, which is from government.

✓ Our government has built a public bike system that people can use.

Awkward phrasing and redundancy. 'System for public people' is incorrect; use 'public bike system' or 'public bicycle system'. 'Reuse the bike, which is from government' is unnatural—better: 'that people can use' or 'provided by the government'. Present perfect 'has built' is acceptable if emphasizing result; keep it. Suggestion: simplify noun phrases and use clear relative clauses. (Grammar problem type ID:21)

× And we don't have to pay a lot of money, maybe just $5 or $10, and we can write for 30 minutes.

✓ We don't have to pay much money, maybe just $5 or $10, and we can ride for 30 minutes.

Word choice and spelling error: 'write' is wrong; should be 'ride' (use the bike). 'Don't have to pay a lot of money' is understandable but 'much money' is more natural with negative. Modal 'can' is used correctly to express ability/permission. Suggestion: correct spelling and use 'much' in negative constructions for natural phrasing. (Grammar problem type ID:4)