Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and directly responds to the question, but it could be improved by adding one clear supporting detail and using a linking word to make it more coherent. Keep sentences concise (no more than 5). Mentioning a brief example or result (e.g., what you did with the bike or how long you kept it) would add specificity.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was younger. Because all the other kids had one, I begged my parents for months and finally got it as a birthday present, which meant I could ride to school and play with friends every afternoon.

提案: Your response starts well but is incomplete and slightly disjointed. Finish the idea in a single coherent sentence and use linking words (e.g., however, now, therefore) to show contrast. Provide a specific, current example or brief comparison to justify your opinion (e.g., popularity in cities vs rural areas, or replacement by motor vehicles).

例: Yes, I think bikes remain popular, but their role has changed: decades ago bicycles were the main transport for many families; however, as the economy has grown, more people now use motorcycles and cars, although bikes are still common in rural areas and for short city trips.

× At the time I was desperate to own a bicycle simply because all the other kids around me had one.

✓ At the time, I was desperate to own a bicycle simply because all the other kids around me had one.

Missing comma after introductory phrase 'At the time' affects sentence clarity and flow. This is a sentence structure/punctuation issue: add a comma after introductory adverbial phrase to separate it from main clause and improve readability.

× I think yes.

✓ I think so.

The phrase 'I think yes' is non-idiomatic in English. Use 'I think so' to express agreement or belief. This is a sentence structure/word choice issue within the allowed list (26). Replace with the conventional expression.

× Decades ago, constrained by limited household incomes, the bicycle served as the primary means of transport for countless families. Yet with the rapid economy expansion nationwide.

✓ Decades ago, constrained by limited household incomes, the bicycle served as the primary means of transport for countless families; yet with the rapid expansion of the economy nationwide, that role changed.

The original second sentence fragment 'Yet with the rapid economy expansion nationwide.' is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb and subject, so it fails as a complete sentence (sentence without a verb/structure error). Also 'economy expansion' is incorrect word order; correct phrase is 'expansion of the economy' or 'economic expansion.' Combine the fragment with the previous sentence or add a main clause. This correction supplies a verb ('changed') and fixes noun phrase order ('expansion of the economy'), creating a complete, coherent sentence.