Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm, tổ chức ý theo cấu trúc: câu chủ đề + chi tiết hỗ trợ (vì sao, tần suất, cảm xúc). Tránh lặp từ và tiếng ậm ừ; sử dụng liên từ để nối ý (for example, so, because). Nên dùng thì quá khứ đúng (had, didn't have) và câu đơn ngắn gọn (không quá 5 câu).

例: I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child because my parents couldn’t afford one. Instead, I often borrowed bikes from my friends to ride around the neighborhood. Because of this, I remember feeling a little disappointed, but I still enjoyed playing outside with them.

提案: Cần phát âm và lựa chọn từ chính xác (bike, ride), dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: trả lời trực tiếp + lý do cụ thể + ví dụ. Tránh câu bị dang dở; dùng linking words (especially, because, for example). Thể hiện ý cụ thể về lợi ích (tiện lợi, tiết kiệm, thân thiện môi trường) và nhóm người dùng (teenagers, commuters). Giữ dưới 5 câu và dùng từ vựng phù hợp.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among teenagers and students. Many people use them to get to school or nearby shops because they are cheap and convenient. Additionally, cycling is good for the environment since it produces no pollution.

× Or when it was a try, uh, my parents don't have enough money to buy my own buy, so I usually use with my friends, Yes.

✓ When I was trying, my parents didn't have enough money to buy me a bike, so I usually used my friends' bikes.

The student used incorrect pronouns and possessive forms (my own buy, use with my friends). Also tense should be past to match 'when I was a child'. Use 'didn't have' for past negative, 'buy me a bike' (correct indirect object), and 'my friends' bikes' for possession.

× And my childhood is not good because I cannot have all my, uh, my bike.

✓ And my childhood was not good because I could not have my own bike.

The sentence mixes present tense ('is', 'cannot') with a past time reference 'childhood'. Change verbs to past tense: 'was' and 'could not'. Use 'my own bike' for correct possession and clarity.

× Uh, definitely yes. So buys are very popular in my country, especially with teenagers that they only use fights for uh, going to school yes and uh, sometime because it can uh protect the environment yes and it's cannot uh make the.

✓ Uh, definitely yes. Bikes are very popular in my country, especially among teenagers; they often use them to go to school. Sometimes people also use bikes because they help protect the environment.

Multiple problems: wrong word choices ('buys' -> bikes, 'fights' -> bikes), incorrect pronoun structure ('that they' unnecessary), and awkward phrasing. Use 'among teenagers' for the group, 'they often use them to go to school' for purpose, and 'help protect the environment' (modal meaning) instead of 'it's cannot make the.' Also adjust tense and sentence structure for clarity.