Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, clear response first, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and repeating. Use simple past correctly (e.g., 'had' or 'borrowed/rented') and a clear reason sentence. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I usually borrowed it from a neighbor rather than owning one. I didn't ride it very often because I preferred playing soccer with my friends.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons or examples using linking words (however, because, for example). Use correct grammar (e.g., 'many people like bicycles' or 'bicycles are popular') and avoid unclear phrases like 'city law is not confirmed'. Be concise and coherent within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in Japan. Many people use them for short trips and commuting. However, in large cities they can be less convenient because traffic, parking rules, and narrow streets make cycling difficult.

× Yes, I hired the bicycle when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child.

The student used 'hired' (meaning rented) which is unlikely for a childhood possession; the intended meaning is possession in the past, so use the simple past 'had'. This fits the past-tense context of 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: use 'had' for past possession and reserve 'hired' for temporary rentals.

× Uh, but uh, I, uh, is it, is it, it is a little time that I, I load the bicycle because I didn't like the bicycle.

✓ But I only had the bicycle for a short time because I didn't like it.

The original is ungrammatical and has word-order and lexical errors. 'it is a little time that I' should be expressed as 'I only had it for a short time' (correct past-tense duration). 'load the bicycle' is incorrect verb choice; likely meant 'had' or 'used'. Also avoid repeating the noun; use pronoun 'it'. Suggestion: simplify to 'I only had the bicycle for a short time because I didn't like it.'

× Uh, that's because.

✓ That's because I didn't enjoy riding it.

The fragment 'That's because.' is incomplete and lacks the reason's content. Provide a full clause explaining the cause, using correct pronouns and verbs. Suggestion: complete the sentence with the intended explanation, e.g., 'That's because I didn't enjoy riding it.'

× I think, I think there's many people, uh, like bicycles in Japan,

✓ I think many people in Japan like bicycles,

'There's many people' is incorrect: 'there's' (there is) should not be used with the plural 'many people' (subject-verb agreement). Also word order is awkward. Use 'many people in Japan like bicycles' for correct agreement and natural word order. Suggestion: place 'many people' as subject and use plural verb 'like'.

× but uh, uh, it is not useful for, for Japanese people to ride bicycles in the city because, uh, that city, the city law is not confirmed with bicycle.

✓ but it is not practical for Japanese people to ride bicycles in the city because city laws regarding bicycles are not well established.

Several issues: 'useful for ... to ride' is unnatural; 'practical' is a better adjective. 'the city law is not confirmed with bicycle' is ungrammatical—likely meant 'city laws regarding bicycles are not well established' or 'not clear'. This fixes preposition and noun phrase use and makes the clause coherent. Suggestion: rephrase to 'city laws regarding bicycles are not well established' or 'there are unclear regulations about bicycles in the city.'