Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two brief supporting details. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood and give a specific example or short reason to make the answer more informative and natural.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I enjoyed riding it almost every day and even joined a local junior racing club, which helped me improve my skills and confidence.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Use coherent linking words (for example, because, so, especially) and avoid repetition. Keep sentences short and use relevant vocabulary like commuting, short journeys, delivery services to clarify why bikes are popular.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and deliveries. For example, in cities motorbikes and bicycles are common for going to work or running errands due to traffic congestion and low fuel costs.

× Definitely as I was, as I was like in my childhood. I like, I am a bike racer, so I like it.

✓ Definitely, I did. When I was a child, I liked bikes. I am a bike racer, so I like them.

This response mixes tenses and has sentence structure problems (Grammar Problem Type ID 26 and 6). The question asks about the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the student should use past tense for possession and preference: use 'did' and 'liked' or 'had' and 'liked'. The original also repeats phrases and uses present tense ('I am a bike racer') which is acceptable as a present fact but must be connected clearly. Suggestions: remove filler words ('as I was', 'like'), use a clear past-tense sentence for childhood ('When I was a child, I had a bike' or 'When I was a child, I liked bikes'), then add a present-tense statement about being a racer as a separate, coherent sentence ('I am a bike racer, so I still like bikes').

× Without a doubt as my country is very much popular in in a in a daily daily looking business, so there are many more usage of bikes in near near areas.

✓ Without a doubt. In my country, bikes are very popular for daily use, so there is much more use of bikes in nearby areas.

This sentence has multiple issues: repetition and fillers, incorrect prepositions and word choice, pluralization and quantifier errors, and awkward sentence structure (Grammar Problem Type IDs 26, 11, 14, 1). 'Very much popular' is incorrect; use 'very popular'. 'In in a in a daily daily looking business' is meaningless and should be 'for daily use'. 'There are many more usage of bikes' mixes plural and singular ('usage' should be 'users' or 'use' and 'many more' with 'use' is awkward). 'Near near areas' should be 'nearby areas'. Suggestions: remove repetitions, use 'In my country, bikes are very popular for daily use' and choose correct quantifiers: 'there is more use of bikes' or 'there are many bike users in nearby areas'.