Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use past tense consistently and articles), and add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word if you add a second idea. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I received a bicycle as a gift when I was seven, and I learned to ride it in the nearby park. After a few weeks of practice, I could ride confidently without training wheels, which made playing outdoors much more fun.

提案: Answer directly and use correct grammar and clearer reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas and give a specific example or brief comparison. Avoid vague phrases and fix subject-verb agreement and word choice.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances. For example, many commuters use bikes to avoid heavy traffic during rush hour, and city governments have added bike lanes to make cycling safer.

× Yes, it was a gift for me when I was 7 year old and I learned to ride a bike when I got this gift.

✓ Yes, it was a gift for me when I was 7 years old, and I learned to ride a bike when I got that gift.

Errors: '7 year old' needs plural 'years' and hyphenation if used as a compound adjective (7-year-old). Also 'this gift' is acceptable but 'that gift' is more natural when referring back to a past item; however the main issue is article/number form. Suggestion: use '7 years old' for age and add a comma before the conjunction for clarity.

× Yes, it was very popular in my country because it can make our more convenient and avoid the traffic jam in the city.

✓ Yes, they are very popular in my country because they can make our travel more convenient and help avoid traffic jams in the city.

Errors: 'it' is singular while referring to bikes (plural) — use 'they' (subject-pronoun agreement). 'Make our more convenient' is missing a noun after 'our' — add 'travel' or 'commute'. 'Traffic jam' should be plural 'traffic jams' when speaking generally. Also tense/modal: 'can make' is okay but use plural 'they' consistently. Suggestion: use correct plural pronouns and include the missing noun, and pluralize 'traffic jam' to 'traffic jams'.