Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Mejora la naturalidad y evita la repetición. Comienza con una oración tema clara, luego añade detalles concretos y usa conectores (for example, because, so). Corrige errores gramaticales como “cycling it” y evita repetir frases (“you can just exercise”). Mantén la respuesta en no más de 3-4 oraciones.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I rode it almost every other day. I enjoyed cycling because it was a fun way to stay fit and explore my neighborhood. For example, I used to ride to the park with my friends after school, which helped me build endurance and socialize.

提案: Haz la respuesta más precisa y fluida, evitando muletillas como “you know” y finalizaciones vagas como “There are so many.” Empieza con una oración tema clara, explica razones específicas y usa conectores (because, therefore, for example). Incluye datos o comparaciones breves si es posible.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Thailand, particularly in Bangkok, because heavy traffic makes cycling a faster alternative. Therefore, many commuters use bicycles or motorbikes for short trips. For example, some neighbourhoods have seen a rise in bike rental services and dedicated lanes to accommodate cyclists.

× I rode it every other day because I thought that cycling it was one of the most effective sports.

✓ I rode it every other day because I thought cycling was one of the most effective forms of exercise.

The phrase 'cycling it' is incorrect because 'cycling' functions as a gerund here and does not take the pronoun 'it'. Also 'sports' is plural and less natural; 'forms of exercise' fits better. Suggestion: remove 'it' after 'cycling' and use 'forms of exercise' to match meaning and collocation.

× Not only you can just exercise, you can just exercise.

✓ Not only can you exercise, but you can also have fun.

The original sentence repeats and uses incorrect word order for the 'not only ... but ...' correlative structure. In English, with inversion after 'not only' the auxiliary should come before the subject ('Not only can you...'). Also the repeated phrase provides no new information. Suggestion: use 'Not only can you X, but you can also Y' with inversion and varied second element.

× Yes, I do think that cycling in Thailand is very famous, especially in Bangkok, the capital of Thailand, because, you know, the traffic in the city is very terrible.

✓ Yes, I do think that cycling in Thailand is very popular, especially in Bangkok, the capital, because the traffic in the city is terrible.

'Famous' is not the best collocation for an activity's popularity; 'popular' is correct. 'Very terrible' is redundant and awkward; use 'terrible' alone. Also remove redundant repetition 'Thailand' after 'capital'. Suggestion: use 'popular' for activities and avoid unnecessary intensifiers like 'very' with negative adjectives.

× So cycling or riding a bike becomes one of the most used transportation in the city.

✓ So cycling or riding a bike becomes one of the most used means of transportation in the city.

'Transportation' as a mass noun needs a preceding quantifier/term; 'means of transportation' is the correct collocation. 'Most used' is passable but 'most commonly used' or 'most used means' works. Suggestion: use 'means of transportation' to correctly refer to types of transport.

× There are so many.

✓ There are so many bikes/people who cycle.

The fragment 'There are so many.' is incomplete because it lacks an object to clarify what is numerous. Suggestion: complete the sentence with the noun being counted, e.g. 'bikes' or 'people who cycle'.