Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (use past tense), then give one or two specific reasons or details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect forms (e.g., use 'didn't have', 'when I was a child', 'there were').

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. When I was young, bikes were scarce in my town and my family couldn't afford one, so I usually walked to school or shared rides with neighbors.

提案: Answer directly, use correct vocabulary and clear reasons. Begin with a topic sentence (present tense), then give specific supporting details and a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'however'). Avoid invented or unclear words and avoid repeating the same phrase.

例: No, bikes are not very popular in my country because most people prefer motorbikes and cars. In addition, many cities lack safe bike lanes, so cycling is uncommon except in a few rural areas.

× No, I do not have a bike when I was a young and there was a limited bikes in our country there, so that's why we do not have or get when we were younger.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was young, and there were only a limited number of bikes in our country, so we did not have or get one when we were younger.

The sentence mixes present and past tense ('do not have' with 'was'). Use past tense 'did not have' and 'were' for past existence. 'A young' is incorrect; use 'young'. 'There was a limited bikes' is incorrect: use plural verb 'were' and 'a limited number of bikes' or 'few bikes'. Also 'have or get' should be clarified to 'have or get one'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently, use correct count expression and singular reference for 'one'.

× No, they are not babbler in our country and there is a preferred way that people always get to a carries.

✓ No, they are not popular in our country and people usually prefer other ways of getting around.

'Babbler' is a wrong word choice; the intended adjective is 'popular'. 'There is a preferred way that people always get to a carries' is ungrammatical and uses incorrect nouns and structure. Use 'people usually prefer other ways of getting around' to convey habitual preference. 'Getting around' is a natural phrase for travel methods.

× So the limit of packets is is scarce.

✓ So the number of bikes is scarce.

'Limit of packets' is incorrect and nonsensical here. The intended idea is scarcity of bikes. Use 'number of bikes' and 'scarce' or 'limited' to express shortage. Ensure noun aligns with context ('bikes').

× So they are not popular. That's why they are not popular.

✓ Therefore, bikes are not popular in my country.

The original repeats the same idea redundantly. Condense into a single clear sentence. This fixes sentence structure and avoids repetition.