Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity and grammar, use a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details. Correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., “bought me a bike” or “bought a bike for me”), avoid filler sounds (“uhm”), and keep the answer to 2–3 well-connected sentences. Use a linking phrase to contrast past and present (e.g., “but now”).

例: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child because my parents bought one to teach me how to ride. However, I don't own a bike now because there are many shared bicycles available in my neighborhood, so I rarely need my own.

提案: Make the answer more organized and use varied vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., “Firstly… Secondly…”). Avoid repetition and correct small errors (e.g., “bikes are” instead of “bike is,” “eco-friendly,” “for exercise”).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Firstly, they are eco-friendly and cheaper than cars, so many people use them to commute. Secondly, people also ride bikes for exercise and leisure because they are convenient and easy to use in urban areas.

× Umm, when I was a child, I did have a bicycle because, uh, my parents bought to me to, for me to learn about how to ride it and, but nowadays I don't have one because I, we think, umm, there is many shared bicycles on our streets, which is a new.

✓ Umm, when I was a child, I did have a bicycle because my parents bought one for me to learn how to ride it, but nowadays I don't have one because we think there are many shared bicycles on our streets, which is new.

Errors involve incorrect preposition and word order: 'bought to me' should be 'bought one for me' using the preposition for to indicate recipient and adding 'one' to refer to the bicycle; 'to learn about how to ride it' is wordy and ungrammatical — use 'to learn how to ride it'; 'there is many shared bicycles' is subject-verb agreement and word order with existential 'there' — correct form is 'there are many shared bicycles'; 'which is a new' is ungrammatical; use 'which is new' or omit. Suggestion: use 'bought one for me', simplify 'to learn how to ride it', and use 'there are many shared bicycles'.

× Yes, I think bike is very popular in my country because first it's very eco friendly and people like to ride a bike for just work out and also for transportation, which because bicycle is really convenient for people to umm to to ride it.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because, first, they're very eco-friendly and people like to ride bikes just for working out and also for transportation, because bicycles are really convenient for people to ride.

Several agreement and word-choice issues: 'bike is very popular' should be 'bikes are very popular' to match plural meaning; 'it's very eco friendly' refers to bikes, so use 'they're' or rephrase; 'people like to ride a bike for just work out' is ungrammatical — 'just for working out' or 'just to work out'; the clause 'which because bicycle is really convenient' is incorrect structure — use 'because bicycles are really convenient'. Suggestions: use consistent plural nouns and matching verbs (bikes are, bicycles are), use 'just for working out', hyphenate 'eco-friendly' and remove filler words.