Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ естественный, но есть ошибки в грамматике и словоупотреблении, а также некоторая лишняя болтовня. Надо сократить длину, исправить грамматику и использовать связки для плавности. Конкретно: сказать «I didn't have a bike» и затем дать одно или два конкретных уточнения. Избегайте фраз типа «pretty uncommon for the child» (лучше «uncommon for children») и «I made a pretty satisfactory results» (неправильная форма; лучше «I was quite happy with it» или «I learned to ride quickly»).

例: No, I didn't have a bike as a young child. I got my first bike at age eleven, which was later than most children, but I learned quickly and was very proud of it.

提案: Ответ понятен, но прерывается и оставляет мысль незавершённой. Лучше дать полное мнение с одной-двумя конкретными причинами и связками. Избегайте разговорных слов «yeah» в формальной оценке; используйте «Yes» или «I think so». Также исправьте фразу «traffic is such a disaster» на более естественное «traffic is a big problem» и завершите мысль: например, «people choose bikes because they are faster and cheaper».

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. Because traffic is a big problem in cities, many people prefer bikes as a faster and cheaper way to get around.

× No, unfortunately I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, unfortunately I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence is correct in past tense; no change needed. The auxiliary did + not with base verb 'have' correctly expresses past negative. Ensure pronunciation of 'didn't' remains clear.

× My first bike was at the age of 11, so it was pretty uncommon for the child, but still I made a pretty satisfactory results.

✓ I got my first bike at the age of 11, so it was pretty uncommon for a child, but I was still quite satisfied with the results.

Original has incorrect verb choice and structure. 'My first bike was at the age of 11' is unnatural; use 'I got my first bike at the age of 11' (subject performing action). 'Uncommon for the child' should be 'for a child' (article and reference). 'I made a pretty satisfactory results' is ungrammatical: 'make results' is wrong and 'results' plural conflicts with 'a pretty satisfactory' which is singular; better to say 'I was still quite satisfied with the results' or 'I was still pretty satisfied.' Suggestions: use appropriate verbs for acquiring possessions (get, receive), match singular/plural and determiners, and use 'satisfied' to describe feelings rather than 'made results.'

× Yeah, I believe bikes are pretty popular in our country, especially when the traffic is such a disaster in our time, everyone tries to use something more practical and.

✓ Yes, I believe bikes are quite popular in our country, especially when traffic is so bad these days; everyone tries to use something more practical.

Problems: informal 'Yeah' changed to 'Yes' for clarity, 'the traffic is such a disaster in our time' is awkward — use 'traffic is so bad these days.' The clause punctuation is incorrect and the sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' Combine clauses properly with a semicolon or conjunction and complete the thought: 'everyone tries to use something more practical.' Suggestions: avoid dangling conjunctions, use concise idiomatic phrases ('so bad', 'these days'), and ensure sentence completion.