Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: use past tense consistently and give a brief additional detail. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + short phrase), then add one supporting detail. Keep it natural and within 2–3 sentences. For example, say where or when you got the bike or how you used it.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it as a birthday present when I was seven and rode it to school and around the neighborhood every day.

提案: Make the answer more natural, use plural and correct verbs, and provide a specific reason or example. Begin with a clear statement, then support it with one or two concise reasons using linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid vague phrases like "that's all."

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many children and adults use them for short journeys. For example, I often see families riding small bikes in parks and people cycling to work in the mornings.

× Yes, I have my bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use simple past 'had' for possession in the past. Also add the article 'a' before 'child'. Suggestion: use 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× I think bike is very popular in our country because I saw many children riding bike or small bike and it was enjoying when I was see them and that's all.

✓ I think bicycles are very popular in our country because I saw many children riding bikes or small bikes, and it was enjoyable to see them.

Multiple issues that match the listed problem types: singular/plural nouns should be plural when speaking generally ('bike' -> 'bicycles' or 'bikes') and countable nouns need articles when singular ('small bike' -> 'small bikes' or 'a small bike'). Also 'it was enjoying when I was see them' is ungrammatical; 'enjoying' is incorrect here and verb phrase should be 'it was enjoyable to see them' or 'I enjoyed seeing them'. Additionally 'I was see' mixes tenses and forms. Suggested corrected sentence: 'I think bicycles are very popular in our country because I saw many children riding bikes or small bikes, and it was enjoyable to see them.'