Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear. Start with a concise topic sentence answering the question, then give 1–2 specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (past tense) and avoid irrelevant information (licenses and driving are not needed for a bicycle). Use linking words for coherence.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn't afford one at the time, so I usually walked to school. However, I remember occasionally borrowing a neighbor's bicycle to ride in the park.

提案: Answer directly then support with specific reasons and examples. Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Add linking words (for example, because, therefore) to make ideas coherent and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or to run errands in busy city centers. Therefore, cycling is a common and practical choice for daily travel.

× Honestly speaking, whenever a child and don't have a bike because at that time I have not any driving license and I don't know how to drive a vehicle.

✓ Honestly speaking, when I was a child I did not have a bike because at that time I did not have a driving licence and I did not know how to ride a vehicle.

The original sentence mixes pronouns and tenses and uses 'whenever a child' incorrectly. Replace 'whenever a child' with 'when I was a child' to refer to the speaker and use consistent past tense. Use 'did not have' for past negative and 'did not know' for past knowledge. Also use 'ride' rather than 'drive' for a bike; 'licence' follows noun 'driving licence'. Suggestions: identify the subject (I) and keep verb tenses consistent (past simple) and use appropriate verb for cycling (ride).

× Well, I think that bikes plays in vital role in humans life because it plays in vital role to commute from one place to another place and most of the individuals like to ride a bike for their traveling.

✓ Well, I think that bikes play a vital role in human life because they are useful for commuting from one place to another, and most people like to ride bikes for travel.

Errors include subject-verb agreement ('bikes plays' should be 'bikes play'), incorrect article and adjective order ('in vital role' -> 'a vital role'), incorrect noun form ('humans life' -> 'human life'), and awkward phrasing ('it plays in vital role to commute' -> 'they are useful for commuting'). Also replace 'most of the individuals' with 'most people' and 'for their traveling' with 'for travel'. Suggestions: ensure plural subjects use plural verbs, use 'a/an' before singular countable nouns, prefer 'commute' as a verb or 'commuting' as gerund, and choose natural collocations (human life, a vital role, commute, most people).