Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly give a reason or short detail. Avoid unnecessary words like “any” with countable nouns here and correct tense/auxiliary use. Use linking words if you add a second sentence (e.g., “because” or “so”). Aim for 1–2 sentences, and fix grammar: say “I didn’t have a bike” or “I didn’t have a bicycle.”

例: I didn’t have a bicycle when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. As a result, I usually walked to school or used public transport.

提案: Improve grammar, remove redundancy, and include a specific reason or example. Use correct verb forms (e.g., “become” → “has become” or “make”). Avoid repeating phrases like “more easier.” Use one clear supporting detail with a linking word (e.g., “because” or “for example”). Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many people use them for short commutes in cities, which reduces traffic and saves money.

× I did not have any bike when I was a child.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child.

The noun 'bike' is countable and when used with 'any' in negative sentences it should be plural ('any bikes') or use the singular with an article ('a bike'). Since the student refers to having one unspecified bike, use the singular with the indefinite article: 'a bike'. To improve, choose 'any bikes' for plural generality (I did not have any bikes) or 'a bike' for singular (I did not have a bike).

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because everything become easier and travelling from here to there is become more easier.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because everything becomes easier and travelling from here to there has become easier.

There are multiple tense and comparative issues. First, the present simple singular third-person requires 'becomes' not 'become' when referring to 'everything' (third-person singular). Second, the phrase 'is become' is incorrect; use present perfect 'has become' to show a change that has occurred up to now. Third, 'more easier' is redundant because 'easier' already expresses comparison; do not add 'more' before a comparative adjective. Also 'travelling' can remain a gerund but pair it with 'has become easier'. To improve, use correct subject-verb agreement ('becomes'), correct tense for change ('has become'), and a single comparative form ('easier').