Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, more concise, and use one clear topic sentence followed by brief supporting detail. Correct tense (use past) and fix articles/adjectives. Use a linking phrase to add a reason or memory. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. My mother bought me a pink bike for my seventh birthday because I loved the color pink then, and she even painted my room the same color.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence stating your view, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitation sounds and unfinished sentences. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "commute," "exercise") and correct grammar ("many people" not "a lot of people" is acceptable but watch verb forms).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular. For example, many people commute by bicycle to work in the mornings, and others cycle as part of their daily exercise routine because it is cheap and good for fitness.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes I did.

The question 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' is in the past tense, so the answer should also be in the past tense. Use 'did' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: respond in past tense when the question refers to a past period.

× it was color pink

✓ it was pink

The phrase 'color pink' is ungrammatical in this context. In English we describe an object's color with the adjective alone: 'it was pink.' Remove the redundant noun 'color' or use 'the color was pink.'

× when my mother bought it for me when I was 7 for my birthday

✓ when my mother bought it for me when I was seven for my birthday

This clause is generally correct in tense but writing numbers under ten should be in words in formal English and the phrase is wordy. Also ensure consistency: 'bought it for me for my seventh birthday' is more natural. Suggest: 'my mother bought it for my seventh birthday.'

× I really loved the color pink and they also painted my room pink.

✓ I really loved the color pink, and my parents also painted my room pink.

The pronoun 'they' is vague here; 'my parents' clarifies the subject. Also add a comma before 'and' to connect the coordinated clauses. Ensure pronouns clearly refer to a known antecedent.

× There's a lot of people every morning that I saw riding a bike for, uh, their work

✓ There are a lot of people every morning whom I see riding a bike to work

Subject-verb agreement with 'there' requires plural verb 'are' for 'a lot of people.' Use present simple 'see' to match habitual action. 'Whom' is more formal for the object of 'see' but 'that' can be used informally. Replace 'for their work' with the idiomatic 'to work.' Remove filler 'uh.'

× that I saw riding a bike for, uh, their work and also, uh, they also include riding a bike as part of their, uh, morning routine or their part of the physical fitness, umm, early in the morning.

✓ that I see riding bikes to work, and they also include cycling as part of their morning routine and physical fitness early in the morning.

Maintain present simple for habitual actions: use 'see' not 'saw.' Use plural agreement 'bikes' and parallel structure: 'part of their morning routine and physical fitness.' Remove fillers 'uh' and 'umm.' Use 'cycling' or 'riding a bike' consistently for clarity.

× I also a.

✓ I do as well.

The fragment 'I also a.' is incomplete and lacks a verb. A complete response that matches earlier statements is 'I do as well' or 'I also ride a bike.' Use a full clause with subject and verb to complete the sentence.