Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần nói rõ và mạch lạc: trả lời trực tiếp, tránh tiếng ồm ồm và lặp từ. Thực hiện cấu trúc đơn giản: câu chủ đề nêu có hay không có xe đạp, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (khi nào, ai tặng, cảm giác). Giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu và dùng từ vựng phù hợp như “bike”, “primary school”, “gave/received”.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me when I was in fifth grade, and I used it to ride around our neighbourhood after school. I remember feeling very proud to ride it with my friends on weekends.

提案: Cần trả lời rõ ràng và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể để chứng minh ý kiến: nêu lý do vì sao xe đạp phổ biến (giao thông, sức khỏe, giá cả), và dùng liên từ (because, for example, also) để kết nối ý. Tránh lặp từ và hesitations; dùng cấu trúc đơn giản 2–3 câu.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, I often see many people cycling in parks and on local streets, especially in the mornings and evenings. Also, cycling has become more common for exercise and commuting in recent years.

× Absolutely umm, like any choice I have, uh, I possess a pack, umm, when I, when I study at primary school, uh, particularly, umm, in, uh, in, uh, fifth grade, my father.

✓ Absolutely. When I was in primary school, particularly in fifth grade, my father bought me a bike.

The original sentence has unclear structure, fillers, and incorrect tense. Use past tense 'was' to match the time frame (you were a child). Remove fillers and redundant phrases. Use a clear subject-verb-object order: 'When I was in primary school... my father bought me a bike.' This fixes sentence structure errors and makes the meaning clear.

× Yes, I think so by are are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think so; bicycles are popular in my country.

The phrase had repeated words and wrong word order. Use simple present 'are' for general facts. Place subject 'bicycles' before verb 'are' to form correct present tense sentence.

× Umm, when I I also use I also, uh, usually, uh, my in the park and I see, umm, any residents no ride bicycle to.

✓ I also usually ride my bike in the park, and I see many residents riding bicycles too.

The original is ungrammatical and full of disfluencies. Use 'usually ride' for habitual action (present simple), place object after verb, and use 'many residents riding bicycles too' to express observation. Replace 'no ride' with 'riding' and add 'many' as a quantifier to make the sentence natural.