Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid filler phrases like "like" and correct grammar (e.g., "when I was a child").

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. The reason is that my school was quite far from home, so my family usually drove me or I took public transport. Therefore, a bike wouldn’t have been practical for my daily commute.

提案: Give a concise direct answer followed by specific details and use linking words for coherence. Use correct nouns and names, and vary vocabulary (e.g., "bike-sharing system"). Include a brief opinion about why it is popular.

例: Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because of an extensive bike-sharing system called YouBike. The bikes are available on many streets, and people can rent them quickly using a card or an app, which makes cycling convenient for short trips and reduces traffic congestion.

× No, I didn't have a bike because the distance between my home and my school is far.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike because the distance between my home and my school was far.

Tense inconsistency: the question is about the past ('Did you have... when you were a child?'), so the clause describing the distance should be in the past tense. Use 'was' instead of 'is' to match past time reference.

× So when I'm going out to school I need to use like transportation or get a car.

✓ So when I went to school I needed to use public transportation or get a ride by car.

Tense and register: The context is past, so use past simple ('went', 'needed'). 'I'm going out to school' is present progressive and inconsistent. 'Like transportation' is informal and unclear; 'public transportation' or 'get a ride by car' is more appropriate.

× So I don't need a bike when I'm trying in my childhood.

✓ So I didn't need a bike when I was a child.

Tense and wording: The sentence should be in the past ('didn't need') to match 'childhood'. 'I'm trying in my childhood' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with 'when I was a child' for natural expression.

× I think it is because in my country we have a borrow system, bike borrow system.

✓ I think they are because in my country we have a bike borrowing system.

Pronoun and number: 'it is' refers to 'bikes are popular' (plural), so use 'they are'. Also improve noun phrase: 'bike borrow system' is awkward; 'bike borrowing system' is correct. Alternatively, 'a bike-sharing system' would be natural.

× It's called you bike and it's all over the street.

✓ It's called YouBike and it's everywhere on the streets.

Capitalization and collocation: Proper name 'YouBike' should be capitalized as a brand. 'All over the street' is awkward; use 'everywhere on the streets' or 'all over the city' to indicate wide availability.

× When we want to use the bike, we can just use our cards to borrow a bike.

✓ When we want to use a bike, we can just use our cards to borrow one.

Article and pronoun: Use 'a bike' for general reference and replace the repeated noun with the pronoun 'one' to avoid repetition. Preposition 'to borrow a bike' is fine but using 'one' is more natural.