Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, use coherent linking words, and provide one or two specific supporting details. Avoid vague or incorrect word choices (e.g., “biased” is wrong here) and reduce redundancy. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and use accurate tense and prepositions.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it was unsafe. For example, many children in my neighborhood had accidents while riding, and we lived very close to a busy road, so my parents were worried I might ride into traffic. As a result, they preferred I use public transport or walk.

提案: Make your answer more concise and use correct grammar and linking words. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your view, then give a specific contrast and an example. Use correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., 'live' instead of 'reside' in casual speech, and 'from where I live').

例: It depends on the region. In my city I rarely see people cycling, but in the northern region many people rely on bicycles as an affordable way to get around, especially in rural areas where public transport is limited.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents were against it.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents were against it.

No grammatical change needed; sentence correctly uses past simple to describe a past state. No error found.

× Most of the young people around me at the time had biased and they usually got injured when they ride these bikes.

✓ Most of the young people around me at the time were reckless and they usually got injured when they rode these bikes.

The word 'biased' is an incorrect adjective in this context; 'reckless' or 'careless' fits the intended meaning. Also verb tense after 'usually' referring to past habits should be past simple: 'rode'. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjective for meaning and keep past tense consistent for past habitual actions.

× Also, we were staying quite closer to the roadside and then they were scared I would ride around that lane.

✓ Also, we lived very close to the roadside, so they were afraid I would ride along that lane.

Use 'lived' rather than 'were staying' for habitual residence in the past. 'Closer' needs a comparator; use 'close' with adverb 'very'. 'Scared' is better as 'afraid' in this structure. Use 'so' instead of 'then' to connect clauses. Use preposition 'along' rather than 'around' for riding on a lane. Suggestions: use simple past for past states and consistent prepositions ('close to', 'ride along').

× Well I think it depends on where someone reside, cause from where I am staying I don't usually see people riding bikes.

✓ Well, I think it depends on where someone resides, because where I live I don't usually see people riding bikes.

Subject-verb agreement: 'someone' requires third-person singular verb 'resides' (grammar problem type: third person singular but listed under present tense here). Use 'because' instead of informal 'cause'. 'I am staying' is unnatural for a general present state; use 'I live'. Suggestions: use correct third-person singular 'resides', avoid informal contractions in formal speech, and use 'live' for residence.

× But I think when you go to the northern region a whole lot of people have bikes that they use for their transportation.

✓ But I think when you go to the northern region, a lot of people have bikes that they use for transportation.

Phrase 'a whole lot of' is informal; use 'a lot of' in spoken but 'a whole lot of' can be acceptable — here keep 'a lot of' for clarity. 'Their transportation' is wordy; 'transportation' or 'getting around' is better. Added comma after subordinate clause. Tense is appropriate (present general statement). Suggestions: prefer concise phrasing: 'a lot of people have bikes they use for transportation.'