Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details with linking words. Correct phrasing: use 'ride a bike' not 'practice to ride 1' and avoid repeating words like 'bike bicycle'.

例: No, I didn't own a bike as a child. However, I often borrowed my brother's bike to learn how to ride, and after a few weeks of practice I felt confident cycling on quiet streets.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (e.g. 'not as popular as they used to be', 'modes of transportation', 'more comfortable'). Provide one or two concrete examples or trends.

例: Bicycles are less popular now than when I was a child. For example, many people prefer motorcycles because they are faster and more comfortable for longer distances, whereas bikes are still common among teenagers and for short trips in residential areas.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I used to borrow my brother's bike bicycle so that I could practice to ride 1.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I used to borrow my brother's bicycle so that I could practice riding.

The phrase 'practice to ride' is incorrect in English. After 'practice' we use the -ing form of the verb, so 'practice riding' is correct. Also 'bike bicycle' is redundant; use 'bicycle' or 'bike' but not both. Remove the stray '1' at the end.

× Not as as it used to when I was a child.

✓ Not as much as it used to be when I was a child.

The original has repetition 'as as' and missing words to form a comparative expression. Use 'not as much as it used to be' to compare popularity now with the past. This fixes word repetition and completes the structure.

× I often see a lot of teenagers or even adults use bicycles as one of their mode of transportation.

✓ I often see a lot of teenagers and even adults using bicycles as one of their modes of transportation.

After 'see' when describing an activity, use the -ing form ('using'). Also 'teenagers or even adults' is better as 'teenagers and even adults'. 'One of their mode' is singular/plural mismatch; 'modes' agrees with 'one of their'. This corrects verb form and plural agreement.

× But as we grew older they they use motorcycles now since it is a lot of it is a lot comfortable than bicycles and.

✓ But as we grew older they used motorcycles instead, since motorcycles are much more comfortable than bicycles.

The sentence contains repetition 'they they' and mixes past and present incorrectly. The context 'as we grew older' implies past shift, so 'they used motorcycles' fits. 'It is a lot of it is a lot comfortable' is ungrammatical; use 'much more comfortable'. Also 'than bicycles' completes the comparison. Removed trailing 'and'.