Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cümlenizin zaman ve fiil uyumunu düzeltmelisiniz. Geçmişten bahsederken 'have' yerine 'had' kullanın ve cümleyi doğal hâle getirmek için daha kısa, net bir yapı kullanın. Ayrıca ek bilgi verirken 1-2 destekleyici cümleyle neden veya bir anekdot ekleyin. Örneğin: hangi yaşta, nasıl bir bisiklet olduğu veya bisikletle neler yaptığınız gibi detaylar ekleyin. Bağlaçlar gerekiyorsa basit olanları (when, because, and) kullanın.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle and I learned to ride it in my neighborhood park when I was seven.

提案: Düşüncenizi daha net ve kibar ifade etmeyi öğrenmelisiniz. Olumsuz yanıt verirken doğrudan 'No' demek yerine 'Not really' ya da 'I don't think so' gibi daha doğal ifadeler kullanın. Ayrıca nedenleri açık ve düzgün cümlelerle verin: 'the roads are bad' yerine 'the roads are in poor condition' gibi daha uygun kelimeler tercih edin. Gereksiz dolgu ifadelerinden (uh, or) kaçının. Bağlaçlarla mantıklı bir neden-sonuç akışı kurun (because, so). Örnek olarak, şehirden uzaklık, altyapı veya iklim gibi spesifik nedenler verin.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because many roads are in poor condition and traffic can be dangerous. As a result, most people prefer to use cars or public transport.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used the present tense 'have' while referring to a past time 'when I was a child', so past tense 'had' is required (Present tense issue -> use past). Also missing the article 'a' before 'child'. Suggestion: match verb tense to time expressions; use 'had' and include the article 'a'.

× No, I think it's not because or uh, roads are sucks and uh, I can't use it in there, so I think it's hard.

✓ No, I don't think so because the roads are bad and I can't use a bike there, so I think it's difficult.

Problems include incorrect pronoun/contracted form 'it's not' used awkwardly for 'I don't think so' and incorrect 'roads are sucks' (mixes plural noun with verb 'suck' incorrectly) and wrong preposition 'in there'. Use 'the roads are bad' or 'roads are in bad condition' and 'I can't use a bike there'. Suggestion: use 'I don't think so' for negating opinion, use adjective 'bad' (not 'sucks'), and use 'there' without 'in' or say 'in that place'.