Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, correct errors, avoid repetition, and add one clear supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought me a blue bike for my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood with my friends every afternoon. It was my favorite toy because it gave me freedom and made it easy to visit pals.

提案: Answer directly, correct grammar, and add one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and avoid vague phrases. Keep the response concise and natural.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, I see dozens of commuters cycling to work every morning, and when I was a child my friends often showed off their newly decorated bikes.

× Yes I did have a back back when I was little it was blue but that my dad gave me is my 7th birthday.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was little; it was blue and my dad gave it to me for my 7th birthday.

Errors: incorrect word 'back' instead of 'bike', wrong clause order and missing preposition 'for', and punctuation. Use past simple 'did have' is acceptable but clearer to combine clauses and use 'gave it to me for my 7th birthday' to show the recipient and occasion. Suggestion: use correct noun 'bike', include commas/semicolons to separate ideas, and use 'gave it to me for' to indicate the occasion.

× I used to ride ride it around neighborhood with my friends.

✓ I used to ride it around the neighborhood with my friends.

Errors: duplicated verb 'ride ride' and missing article 'the' before 'neighborhood'. 'Used to' is followed by the base verb 'ride' (not -ing). Suggestion: remove duplicate word and add 'the' to specify the neighborhood.

× Yes I do think bikes are popular in our country since I've seen a lot of people riding their bikes on the street in the every morning.

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are popular in our country since I've seen a lot of people riding their bikes on the street every morning.

Errors: unnecessary article 'the' before 'every morning' and punctuation. 'Every morning' does not take 'the'. Suggestion: remove 'the' and add commas to improve clarity; present perfect 'I've seen' is fine for recent experience.

× Also back when I was a kid my friends always showing off about how cool their bike is.

✓ Also, back when I was a kid, my friends were always showing off about how cool their bikes were.

Errors: missing auxiliary verb for continuous past ('were always showing off'), singular/plural mismatch 'bike' vs 'friends' and tense consistency. Use past continuous 'were showing off' or 'always showed off'; change 'bike' to 'bikes' and 'is' to 'were' to match past context. Suggestion: use 'were always showing off' or 'always showed off' and make nouns and verbs agree in number and tense.