Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and precise: use 'ride' instead of 'drive', give a concise topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details (when, who gave it, how you felt or what you learned). Avoid small grammatical errors and keep under five sentences.

例: Yes. I got my first bicycle when I was in seventh grade, and a family friend gave it to me for my birthday. I loved learning to ride because it made me feel independent, and I spent many afternoons practicing until I could ride without help.

提案: Make your answer more fluent and grammatical: use correct subject-verb agreement ('bikes play'), state your main idea in one clear sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (who uses them, why, or where). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because' for coherence.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many students and office workers ride bikes to school or work to avoid traffic and save money on petrol.

× Yes, I remember when I was in my 7th grade I got my first bicycle and I really enjoyed learning how to drive it.

✓ Yes, I remember that when I was in seventh grade I got my first bicycle and I really enjoyed learning how to ride it.

Problems: incorrect verb choice 'drive' for bicycle and minor article/wording. 'Drive' is used for cars; use 'ride' for bicycles. Also 'in my 7th grade' is non-idiomatic; use 'when I was in seventh grade' or 'in seventh grade'. The sentence tense is past, which is correct; keep past simple verbs 'remember', 'got', 'enjoyed'. Suggestion: use 'ride' for bikes and write grade ordinal without 'my' or with 'my' plus 'grade' omitted for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, bikes plays a major role in daily transportation where people are still using bikes to travel.

✓ Yes, bikes play a major role in daily transportation; people still use bikes to travel.

Problem: subject-verb agreement. 'Bikes' is plural so the verb should be 'play' not 'plays'. Also revise wordiness: 'where people are still using bikes to travel' is awkward; use simple present 'people still use bikes to travel' to state a general truth. Keep tense present to match question about current popularity. Grammar problem type ID:27

× So it could be like if they want to travel to their school or to their offices.

✓ For example, they use bikes to travel to school or to their offices.

Problem: sentence fragment/awkward conditional 'it could be like if' is ungrammatical. Replace with a clear example phrase such as 'For example,' and use simple present 'use' to state habitual action. Also 'their school' is fine but 'to school' is more natural; 'their offices' could be 'their offices' or 'work'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× People do travel in bikes in my country.

✓ People do travel by bike in my country.

Problems: preposition and noun form. Use 'by bike' or 'by bicycle' to indicate mode of transport, not 'in bikes'. Also 'do travel' is emphasised present simple; it's acceptable but simpler 'people travel by bike' is more natural. Keep present tense for general statement. Grammar problem type ID:6