Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use past tense for a past event. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and long, unclear phrases. Keep answers under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle that I loved riding after school. Often, while I was in class I would count the minutes until I could go out and cycle around the neighborhood. Because the roads were quiet in the evenings, I felt free and practiced tricks with my friends.

提案: Organize the answer: give a clear opinion first, then compare places with specific reasons and linking words. Use correct country/place names and avoid confusing contrasts. Use present tense for general facts and be concise.

例: Generally, bicycles are fairly popular in India, but popularity varies by region. For example, in smaller towns fewer people use bikes because public transport or scooters are more common. In contrast, in the UK cycling is more popular due to better bike lanes and a stronger cycling culture, so more people commute by bike.

× Yes, I do have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question asks about possession in the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the response should use past tense. 'I do have' is present tense and does not match the question. Use 'I did' or 'Yes, I had' to correctly indicate past possession. Suggestion: use past simple for past situations (I had / I did).

× I still remember my old childhood days where there's a constant thinking while in school when I get the moment to ride that bike again in the evening.

✓ I still remember my childhood days when I was constantly thinking at school about when I would get the chance to ride that bike again in the evening.

Multiple issues: 'there's' (there is) is present and inappropriate for a past memory, so it should be changed to a past construction. 'where' is incorrect for time; use 'when' for time clauses. 'constant thinking' needs natural phrasing 'constantly thinking' or 'was constantly thinking'. 'when I get the moment' should be past/future-in-past: 'when I would get the chance'. Use consistent past tense for memories. Suggestion: use 'when I was constantly thinking at school about when I would get the chance...'.

× So I'm from India and generally in India in low tier cities bike are not very popular.

✓ I am from India, and generally in India in low-tier cities bikes are not very popular.

Problems: 'So' is informal and unnecessary at the start. 'low tier' should be hyphenated as 'low-tier' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. 'bike are' has subject-verb agreement and plural noun issue: 'bikes' plural with plural verb 'are'. Also include commas for clarity. Suggestion: pluralize 'bikes' and hyphenate 'low-tier'.

× But in the Taiwan cities, yeah people occasionally ride the bikes but it's not very much popular as compared to I'm currently living in UK and as compared to UK it's very much popular here.

✓ But in Taiwanese cities, people occasionally ride bikes, although they are not very popular compared with the UK, where bikes are much more popular.

Multiple problems: 'in the Taiwan cities' is awkward; use 'in Taiwanese cities' or 'in cities in Taiwan'. 'yeah' is informal and unnecessary. 'ride the bikes' should be 'ride bikes' (no article). 'not very much popular' is ungrammatical; use 'not very popular' or 'much less popular'. 'as compared to I'm currently living in UK' is incorrect structure and missing articles: 'compared with the UK, where I currently live' is correct. Also ensure consistent comparison: 'much more popular' for UK. Suggestion: restructure sentence for clarity and correct prepositions/articles.