Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문법과 시제 사용이 가장 큰 문제입니다. 과거 경험에 대해 말할 때는 과거 시제를 사용해야 하고, 단어 선택(예: Bible → bike)과 문장 구조가 정확해야 합니다. 간결한 주제문으로 시작한 뒤, 필요한 경우 과거의 구체적 상황(누가 줬는지, 몇 살 때였는지, 왜 사용하지 않았는지)을 연결어(예: because, so, but)를 사용해 덧붙이세요. 문장 수는 1~3문장으로 제한하고 반복을 피하세요.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I didn’t use it often because my neighborhood was busy and my parents were worried about my safety.

提案: 의견을 표현할 때는 명확한 주제문과 구체적인 이유나 예시를 제시해야 합니다. 중복되는 표현(“I think”, “in my opinion”)을 피하고, 연결어(eg: however, although, because)로 근거를 설명하세요. 또한 ‘some groups of people’ 같은 표현은 구체적으로(예: students, delivery workers) 말하면 좋습니다. 문장은 1~3문장으로 간결하게 유지하세요.

例: In my opinion, bikes are somewhat popular in my country, especially among students and delivery workers, because they are cheap and convenient for short trips.

× Yes I do. I have a Bible when I was young but at this time I but at that time I did not really use a bike.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was young, but I didn't really use it at that time.

Multiple tense errors and irrelevant word choice: 'Yes I do' should match past tense of the question 'Did you have', so use 'Yes, I did'. 'I have a Bible when I was young' is incorrect: 'have' should be past 'had' and 'Bible' is likely a typo for 'bike', so change to 'I had a bike when I was young'. Use past simple negative 'didn't really use it' for 'did not really use a bike'. Remove redundant words 'at this time' and duplicate 'but'. Suggestions: pay attention to the question tense and use past simple for completed past events; check word choice to avoid typos; keep sentence structure concise.

× I think it's my in my opinion, I think maybe it's popular in in some group are people, but in my opinion I did not.

✓ I think, in my opinion, bikes may be popular among some groups of people, but I don't think they are generally popular.

Awkward repetition and tense mismatch: 'It's my in my opinion' is redundant; use 'in my opinion' once. 'maybe it's popular in in some group are people' has word order and preposition errors — use 'popular among some groups of people'. 'but in my opinion I did not' mixes past tense 'did not' with present opinion; use present tense 'I don't think' to express current opinion. Suggestions: avoid repeating the same phrase, use 'among' for groups, maintain consistent tense (present for current opinions), and use clear subject reference ('bikes' or 'they').