Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, use correct verb tense (past), and avoid irrelevant or stereotypical explanations. Add one specific supporting detail and a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents thought it was safer for me to walk or use public transport, so they never bought one. For example, I usually walked ten minutes to school with my friends, which was my main way of getting around.

提案: Work on natural phrasing, vocabulary and fluency. Start with a direct topic sentence, then use a linking phrase to add specific reasons and an example. Use accurate collocations (e.g., "popular", "means of transport", "commute"). Keep responses concise and coherent.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient means of transport. For instance, many middle-class families use bicycles to commute short distances, especially in crowded cities where parking cars is difficult.

× No, I have no bike when I was a child because I am a girl so that's why my parents not about me a bike.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because I was a girl and my parents did not buy me a bike.

Multiple tense and auxiliary errors: 'have' should be past 'did not have' to match 'when I was a child' (past time). 'I am a girl' should be past 'I was a girl' to maintain consistent past narration. 'my parents not about me a bike' is ungrammatical; correct auxiliary 'did not buy' plus object 'me a bike' yields 'my parents did not buy me a bike'. Use past simple for completed actions in the past and include the auxiliary 'did' for negatives. Suggestions: Use past simple for events in the past, use 'did not + base verb' for negatives, keep verb tenses consistent within the sentence.

× Yes, bikes are very famous in my country because it is a good way to travel 1 area to another and also a personal transport is good for every middle class family.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are a good way to travel from one area to another, and personal transport is good for every middle-class family.

Several issues: 'famous' is awkward for objects; use 'popular'. 'it is a good way' should refer to bikes (plural) so use 'they are' (subject-verb agreement / third person plural). 'travel 1 area to another' should be 'travel from one area to another' (preposition and article). 'a personal transport' is unnatural; use 'personal transport' or 'a personal mode of transport'. 'middle class' as an adjective should be hyphenated 'middle-class family'. Suggestions: Match verb number to the subject (they are), choose appropriate collocations ('popular', 'travel from...to'), and use hyphenation for compound adjectives.